This poem is a melodious catharsis. The poem as a whole is very nice, but my favorite part is the last stanza. I guess those lines resonated with me the most.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Appreciate the reading....the last stanza is my favorite as well. thank you~
It seems to zig zag here and there - which I do not think is a negative thing - I am always reminded that we already have it ALL within us - and when I was reading your words it was this thought banging me in the head ... you closing words brought it all home ... in the circles and roundabouts, sooner or later we all come home X Nicely done my Friend X
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Well hell there! That it does and in most reads I tend to find myself trying to let those horses zig.. read moreWell hell there! That it does and in most reads I tend to find myself trying to let those horses zig and zag even farther but fortunately I rein the temptation in, having to bring them home and when I do it is most certainly that final line that is the call. “Beauty is truth, truth beauty, —that is all / Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know”. Keats ...One of the most talked over final lines to a poem I can remember. Thanks and wonderful to have you stopping by..been awhile for us huh...smiles.
I just reread this ... perhaps I was on drugs last time I read it.
this is kinda ver.. read moreI just reread this ... perhaps I was on drugs last time I read it.
this is kinda very up my alley - it is all within and what a damn eloquent way to write it and tumble it out into the world ...
Whatever indeed my friend, it is all perception and yes of course we had all of it there within us all along.
it's really lovely ... X
4 Years Ago
On drugs?..God i hope so ;)
Thank you so much and WHAT a wonderful way to put a rebuttal int.. read moreOn drugs?..God i hope so ;)
Thank you so much and WHAT a wonderful way to put a rebuttal into words...I must get back to your poetry asap ..tomorrow of course cause I sucklol. No..actually I'm just in the middle of another beast of a poem so apologies but ya never leave your pets unattended as well you know but I will be there soon and thank you so much for such a beautiful rebuttal or whatever you call it. Loved the way you put the "tumble out into the world"~
Thank you Esther..I hope it gave you just a little of that "gulp" feeling in the final line ..Smiles.. read moreThank you Esther..I hope it gave you just a little of that "gulp" feeling in the final line ..Smiles.
very interesting twists and turns ..to the inside of things ;) a scent of nihilism perhaps .. this in particular "...spell binds..." my noodle "Like an untouched ovary against the galaxy" wow says i! never could a purer warrior be found ... i think the closing is so strong ..the schisms without and within .. tearing and rending ... i get a brief resolution when the weight is lifted ..but ...not quite ... still the dilemma persists as now it lives within me ... what a spooky kind of trip this is for me ... for internal people there can be very serious dangers .. and great reward as well ... whew .. i will try to take this one with me today .. in gratitude for my moments ;)
E.
ps. noticed a review you left on Kelly's Keats tribute and thought i would invite myself to your house ...hope you don't mind :)
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
My house is always open, unless, well as we all need from time to time, it is closed...so yes you ar.. read moreMy house is always open, unless, well as we all need from time to time, it is closed...so yes you are very welcomed here indeed and I am very grateful for it. This review hits and takes me back when I started this whole strange madness. As always it was a sentence, a noun, or a word lingering on a branch that stared me down like a sort of demon itself..it all begins there. Strangely enough, tonight, in a conversation with another poet I mentioned how I didn't always need to feel to begin a poem because once begun that poem will probably take me to a place I may not have realized I was at emotionally so then the mood will surface and god help us all...lol. Doesn't always work but when it does it is a wonderful release. Some deeply interesting remarks and some of them quite introspective in that you have noted a personal reaction to the inner as well as outer weight of the words' only a reader or writer of weight would recognize and express such things so well. I look forward to reading and sharing in your house as well. Wonderful journey and relapse you have taken me through here as well. Much appreciation and very glad you stopped by to read and to take the "moments" onward with you as well. P.
6 Years Ago
you are welcome for sure..thank you for sharing the "process" you went through and go through in cre.. read moreyou are welcome for sure..thank you for sharing the "process" you went through and go through in creating ... its a bit different and yet the same every isn't it? ;)
Two drops insomnia.. one glass or bottle of red wine and a sudden sentence between three and four .. read moreTwo drops insomnia.. one glass or bottle of red wine and a sudden sentence between three and four am...wait for the muse to shut off the standard synapses and then you ruin it the nest day..yeah pretty much the same since Chaucer and beyond...lol. A pleasure.
"Whatever blushing star,
Fragrant sound, or distant hush
Spell binds your reason
Like an untouched ovary against the galaxy"
A most impressive read, Joseph. Are you really as wonderful as you seem? I am inclined to believe so.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Well let's not jump to any hasty conclusions..time has a way of bleeding out illusions. I'll toss my.. read moreWell let's not jump to any hasty conclusions..time has a way of bleeding out illusions. I'll toss my stone and trust in its lonely ripple. Perhaps the shore will accept its spread and then we will know. But if this speaks to you, for now a humble smile will more than do. Thank you Kelly.
What happens at the end is for good and then "what is out there is within"!!!
I bet you've gripped your muses perfectly, no?
Thanks for this grand poetic read and you know that I coat no sugar ;)
"I coat no sugar"..I like that. I've heard versions of that adage.."Sugar coating" "Laying it on a b.. read more"I coat no sugar"..I like that. I've heard versions of that adage.."Sugar coating" "Laying it on a bit thick" but not yours. Cool.Thank you Tahsin...I often consider the land by which you see your life and wonder how it differs ..the smells, the rains, the flora and fauna, particularly the birds of the morning. Do you go for walks and listen to your grandmother or father tell you about the way it use to be. It is quite the meditation when i imagine. Oh and as for the muses..I think they grip me and it is just an important to know how and when to go along with the ride...especially when you are the one steering the ship. Smiles!!
6 Years Ago
Hmmm....tis hard to be on the nature's track when one's constrained to live in the modern arena...bu.. read moreHmmm....tis hard to be on the nature's track when one's constrained to live in the modern arena...but, none can stop me to try smelling my soil...so I try and find it soothing even if it's for a little time. ...
Thanks so much for keeping a "friendhood" towards me...and You're warmly welcome :)
6 Years Ago
We are poets, you and I, paying our dues for the wonderful yet oh so foolish decision of choosing th.. read moreWe are poets, you and I, paying our dues for the wonderful yet oh so foolish decision of choosing the page as our constant toil..so of course I will keep and enjoy, as well as hopefully earn your friendship and I am grateful that you have been so kind and patient with my questions and curiosities about your country. Smiles.
Amazing use of words and thoughts.
"Whatever was will never fade
Inviting a seed of perception, a pain, a want
To walk
Along all that has deserted"
The lines above were my favorite. This could be a lead for a wonderful epic tale. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Well thank you for bringing the wine lol. I am glad you enjoyed it."epic tale" huh...."hmmm?!..not .. read moreWell thank you for bringing the wine lol. I am glad you enjoyed it."epic tale" huh...."hmmm?!..not a bad idea,:)
This is brilliant writing, very imaginative, original & thought-provoking. I honestly do not know how to process your message in its entirety, but I just love the way you express yourself. I love the way you use "whatever" repeatedly, giving this a pleading compelling sensation. I love the way much of your imagery is related to the skies, the universe, the unknown. Your ending is compelling & impressive in the way you craft ideas into wordplay (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Well, sometimes it can as if poetry is a great celebration of merely language shared with fellow poe.. read moreWell, sometimes it can as if poetry is a great celebration of merely language shared with fellow poets and/or . the simplicity with good friends that can give you that "ahhhhhh" moment
*it can feel as if poetry..PS.those are for me the greatest of moments :)
6 Years Ago
Sometimes it seems some reviewers are only interested in the rulebook, but for me, like you, I love .. read moreSometimes it seems some reviewers are only interested in the rulebook, but for me, like you, I love just making a connection with my writing. There are so many levels where we can connect, too! *smile*
6 Years Ago
Couldn't agree more. And you even add hugs for crying out loud! :)
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