Ya, something else is blooming in your artistry. This is not a complaint lol A stunner, sir!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
,,lol..No it's not. :) Actually I have been sleeping well so who knows perhaps the well needed rest.. read more,,lol..No it's not. :) Actually I have been sleeping well so who knows perhaps the well needed rest and how dare I, came into their moment where the teeth of want arise and so begins to create before it ever arrives.
Neatly written..... A different experience from the normal pome
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Well..hey.. "different"…about time I heard my poetry described as such..lol. Seriously ..A wonderf.. read moreWell..hey.. "different"…about time I heard my poetry described as such..lol. Seriously ..A wonderful as well as honest compliment for
any writer so thank you VERY much~
I'm really enjoying this new style you've adopted! Each word, each wise and visual phrase, carries such impact- I find myself re-reading several times through as I feel each shade and appreciate each tone like new. And still, you have a gift for first lines that I am constantly in adoration of. This first stanza is gold! Also really loved, "A single touch. And all becomes my rainy dusk." I find strong overtones of lust and a new, unfamiliar relationship budding in this composition. There's the 'fallacy of love' here, or maybe you're just trying to figure s**t out. It's versatile enough to draw different scenerios out of it and I love that... and sometimes, I find a 'fraction of forgetting' will never fully suffice when one considers that if I truly want to forget something, it's probably awful or embarrassing, and i'd rather not remember the majority of it! But that's me. I dream of the day where Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless mind will become possible and I can shed my shell and transcend. Girlish dreams, I know. But dreams are the fetal precursors to reality. :) Sincerely love this piece, P.
Ahh "but what dreams may come when we have shuffled off this moral coil must give us pause…"there'.. read moreAhh "but what dreams may come when we have shuffled off this moral coil must give us pause…"there's the respect. Death? Love? Are they not of the same venom when the heart is considered…"the fetal precursors"…now that could kill me for a lifetime. And in the eternal sunshine wasn't the true gift in remembering (been a while.. MOVIE WEEKEND!!)..lol.
In this one it is death…sleep and many other creatures of specter that have come to my bedside lustfully to sway the poet from his death. That is the struggle..No on elides a happy poet man..lol.
As for the first few lines that's often where the haunting begins don't you think?
You find yourself somewhere and this little moment creeps in through your brow and whispers, "The killer awoke before dawn…he put his boots on..took a face from the ancient gallery"…lol.
Love all that come and push at my brief portal but you're truly a rarity Kristallo. Be by to collect my heart soon…Mwuah~
9 Years Ago
"breath…sleep and many.."
.don't you just hate it when the computer jumps your thoughts!