Stones

Did you find it?

Steal tranquility 

From every stone

Every scream

Was there a moment

In transition

A rich spark of clarity

Perhaps you sat painless on a moderate 

Laughing 

While you watched us all pace

Is your bitter amusement

Finally

Out 

Did wings replenish your eyes 

The ones now burned into ash

The ones that seized us all in youthful rapture

What happened...

 GODDAMN IT!

Even now 

Five years 

I can smell the ward 

I reminisce

Throw everything I have 

Through the pain and glass just to wake you

Stir the salvation of why you even came

Is it softer now

Do the days pass as lovers 

Innocently

The nights 

Your loftier womb

I guess I have nothing left

But I miss you

I hurt

Relentless 

A black blossoming hole 

In everything I know

Reviews

[Speak]

Ahhhh your smooth words drip like honey and the intense nostalgia and longing conveyed in this poem, it satifys my soul! Goodness! I could die happy reading your poetry, thank you for blessing writers cafe with your delectable words! ~Cheers

[Perdition]

Well don't die but rather fill these pages along with me and together we will be cheered immortal :) …Thanks " Speak"..the kindest of review I must admit~

[Kristallo]

The sting of nostalgia never really stops aching for those generous with their heart, does it? This is a powerfully worded piece, strong imagery and extraordinary in it's carefully placed expressions for the many phases and shades of love lost. "A black blossoming hole in everything I know" is a f*****g fantastic, genius, way to have expressed the 'right down to the soul' ache of loss. You capture, so cunningly, the many tones of human nature and experience in so few words that it baffles and inspires me both!

also, wanted you to know that I LOVED this: "Is it softer now
Do the days pass as lovers
Innocently
The nights
Your loftier womb" ---Beautiful, Perdition.

[Perdition]

Damn! When I was writing this I must have fallen away into a hundred million pieces. I had to pick myself up off the searing floors of hell to keep going. I imagined voices asking if I needed anything else…if maybe THIS image might help…a swelling hand on a hospital bed that was coma swept..kidneys failing and skin breaking open from the pressure. I don't believe I've cried this much as I did in writing this one out till the end. Nothing breaks you more than what can never be undone and I was grateful that there was no soft hand to offer me water or pull back the hair and pull me away from the breaking. Nothing more devastating then having something as a poet devastating happen to you and NOT writing about it…That means walking into the flames and accepting the scorching wounds of blistering slow agonizing death just to offer everything you have; all this knowing that you will only come as close as you are able.. AND that hopefully it will be enough. As The Who put: (and too much in this song to write it all out) but…"...naked stoned and stabbed...I call that a bargain…the best I've ever had"

[Alisa Js]

There are those certain ones that though away, are never really gone. At least, this is what this one spoke to me about.

I remember a season in my life that I thought could never end, and when it did, I was speechless...dumbfounded for days and weeks and months afterward.

This is what I felt from this piece...a certain sense of wtf!


Alisa 💫

[Perdition]

Did HI just use the wtf?? WOW!! Now I know I'm on the right track…lol. Thanks and keep at it "struggles": )

[Alisa Js]

lol...I wondered if you would catch that.... progress man! progress!

Wishing you well.

Alisa ;-)

[Perdition]

"Wondered in I would catch???"…pfffffftttt! UH…venomous arrow....right in the heart…Goodbye cruel everything….uh~

[Perdition]

"If"…I need new fingers or a fresh keyboard today..yikes!!

[Alisa Js]

Maybe the operative word was noticed, rather than catch....as pain was never a factor in the realm of expression shared? Does that make sense or what!? It may be too early for me to be coherent...5:20am....

Over and out from this side of the Pacific...will check in later...

Alisa😎