I am taken aback by the simplistic approach of telling a story in so few of words, Sarah!! That first stanza is gorgeous to me.... You take me to a funeral I had of one of the most special people in my life and not many knew it until the day of the funeral when I showed up with some peaches. lol Long story, but that story is also on here, as well. The mutual feeling of this person gone from me was both a guilty one and also one that felt angry that I was left here without her in my life anymore. I grieve an echoing silence and that is where your poem livens up such emotions once thought to be selfish, and/or personal to only me. The last stanza you have written "Beautiful!!".... lays so sweet a tone of reverence and longing that gets misplaced and distorted to some degree as time passes. Wonderful job!! Beautiful, Sarah.... xoxo -Mark
Every time I read your work, I just imagine it being spoken with an English accent and it just sounds way more appealing to the ear. Anyway, I think you're a really good writer, all of your work has a weird way of being so much more than the words before me. It's so simple and so beautiful, it's awesome. Keep writing, I wanna read more.
I am taken aback by the simplistic approach of telling a story in so few of words, Sarah!! That first stanza is gorgeous to me.... You take me to a funeral I had of one of the most special people in my life and not many knew it until the day of the funeral when I showed up with some peaches. lol Long story, but that story is also on here, as well. The mutual feeling of this person gone from me was both a guilty one and also one that felt angry that I was left here without her in my life anymore. I grieve an echoing silence and that is where your poem livens up such emotions once thought to be selfish, and/or personal to only me. The last stanza you have written "Beautiful!!".... lays so sweet a tone of reverence and longing that gets misplaced and distorted to some degree as time passes. Wonderful job!! Beautiful, Sarah.... xoxo -Mark
I agree with everything everyone else has said. Simple, to the point, well put together, and wondeful word usage here. I really enjoyed this piece and read it several times. Thank you for sharing it with us :)
I'm a Young'un with an old head on my shoulders.
I love in Essex, England.
I loved writing when I was younger but hated learning about it, I'd rather do my own thing with my imagination.
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