And After...a Long Sigh

As much as I'd love to say yes to you,

I'm going to have to disappoint us both

we point way up there to the heavens to describe....

us, but; up there the atmosphere gets too thick for us to rest hope.

We both inhale the air, then simultaneously choke.

Simply too strong for us to take hold of....

right now.

 

Staring into your eyes until I fall again,

kissing your forehead tender,

wiping the sweat off of your brow.

My love, it is awe-inspiring,

the way those brown eyes twinkle.

That and your matching smile is all I need to find you,

in the middle of a crowd.

My subconcious being is being a detriment to the rest of me,

breathing stronger and getting louder....

you are my tender flower and I will breast-pocket you;

or....

place you in between my favorite texts,

or....

pluck away, wondering if you love me or....

love me not...

simply too strong for us to take hold of....

right now.

 

Shhhh....

allow I to just....

take this all in, as I try and let you leave.

As much as I'd love to say yes to you,

I'm going to have to disappoint us both

we point way up there to the heavens to describe....

us, but; up there the atmosphere gets to thick for us to rest hope.

We both inhale the air, then simultaneously choke.

 

On Goodbye.

Author's Note

Really don't know what this is, lol....just wanting to get my form back a little bit...as well as keep up w/what I've been doing lately. Hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

I truly don't know what to say except that this one pulled me in. I know how it is sometimes, those goodbyes, but sometimes they're necessary... I guess. Still doesn't make it any easier, does it? Your form was never lost my friend, and this one is beautiful beyond expression, but then you always could put tears of joy in these eyes. Two both so caught, simultaneously choking on the chemistry, on life...Is it love or not? Will they find a way back before they die choking on goodbye? Image and tone are fantastic Peoples!
XXX

[Ivory]

this is a very beautiful piece. I know all too well about goodbyes, so i was really drawn to this.
Excellent write sweetie : )

[Kat Williams]

Nice melodic flow..felt the pain..subdued but still there. I like

[closed account]

I felt as if it is so difficult to be apart with the one you love, I think you did an awesome job with it!!

[Li Li]

to thick for us to rest hope

[distefano 401]

great write! i like how it was very detailed with lines like, "wiping the sweat off of your brow," and, "the way those brown eyes twinkle". descriptive and beautiful.

[☮]

I understand this and have been here. I definitely appreciate this piece. In life, we men must repeat hurtful words to our lover, not just for her to understand, but for us to register that we're actually saying it.

Enjoyed the flow and heir of drama. Imagery of the sky was a nice touch.

Nice piece. Keep writing.

[J. Hampton]

"My love, it is awe-inspiring,
the way those brown eyes twinkle.
That and your matching smile is all I need to find you,
in the middle of a crowd."

~ well put peOples


and this ....is just bound to be stolen by someone....

"My subconcious being is being a detriment to the rest of me,
breathing stronger and getting louder....
you are my tender flower and I will breast-pocket you;
or....
place you in between my favorite texts,
or....
pluck away, wondering if you love me or....
love me not...
simply too strong for us to take hold of....
right now."

::: There is nothing ....more exhilerating...endearing...or chemically powerful ...than a man who can deny his own flesh::::

:::: self control ... natures most powerful aphroisiac::::

Blesssssssssss

[Choosing Life]

I think you know exactly what it is... excellent scribe...

It can be felt and understood clearly and the heart is open for recieveing an understanding from such a skillful pen...

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Talking about older women. You younger men sure got a way with words. Choking on good bye. Would love to say yes but having to dissappoint us both. Wow. I think you're getting your form back. You got a nice flow and rythm going here. I can feel the fight with emotions. Good write.