Light Rap

This is kind of like "Double-Talk"; but more....sappy? LOL!!! Anyway....it's raining and I've got the slow jams on. Just thought I'd get you all in my zone.

I couldn't stop it with a sign or a light...

you tripped me up with the softest feather,

and now I'm so....

light.

As you peek in on my present and bring light to my

twenty-ith hour,

I've yet to create a scene in which

with your smile I can compare and contrast.

The very mere juxtaposition of hard, heavy me

and soft, light you....

gives understanding new meaning

as my mind has finally been given comprehension

of the marriage between Mother Nature and profound

mathematics.

Let me just be the nursed newborn and

nourish my soul on the strength of your back.

Because, honestly,

I couldn't stop it with a sign or a light....

you tripped me up with the softest feather,

and now I'm so....

light....

that I need your kiss to bring me back down.

I want to go to war with the full arsenal of your love,

and never back down.

And while most use it in vain,

you never use your love to harness me and

bring me back down.

Because honestly,

I couldn't stop it with a sign or a light.

So I sign to you with kisses and affection,

hoping that watching me hover above the clouds

will gain your attention.

You tripped me up with the softest feather,

and finally....

I'm so light.

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

The sensuality of .... " contrast "
man.....and wo-man
Did God do Goooood or what ?
This is an excellent depiction of the paralyzing revalation of encountering
the draw of that

the analogy of love being both a powerful arsenal....yet a gentle feather
is perfect

it is.....both

Hot drop.....indeed
Kudos

Blesssssssssssssssssss

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Man, all a guy has to do is write that poem to me and I would marry him! lol. i really like this. great job at repeating the phrase, "you tripped me up with softest feather and I"m so light..." so nice to hear this. also...i like your title ideas. they seem like they are well thought out...mine usually are not, but yours pull readers in.

[Angel's Lady]

Well, this is perfectly written and I absolutely adore it! It's going in My Favorites! But you knew that, didn't you?

[J.P.O.et]

Yes, those lines that are repeated (like a chorus.....slow jam right) were
perfect and make the reader (me anyways) feel light.
'the marriage between Mother Nature and profound
mathematics.' Deep thought there
'while most use it in vain' People always using love to manipulate and hurt maybe
Def flows, Nice job on this one

J.P.O.et

[Sexy Jones]

"I couldn't stop it with a sign or a light...

you tripped me up with the softest feather,

and now I'm so....

light."

I kept reading that over and over.
I love those few lines.
I love how they are repeated throughout with minor variations at the end.

Great write.

[TamiViolet]

Michael, you combine the sexual with the romantic.........so well. Her softness...
your softness (although you won't admit...smile)... Yeah, love makes us... oh, so
light... when it's real. And your brilliant mind has been given 'comprehension'...
Wonderful, my sweet baby.
XO

[R J Askew]

Great job, sir. Bid bad you turns into a mote of loveborne helium-filled fluffiness. It's a wonderfully uplifting poem from start to finish. I like the repeats and I think the line about the love aresenal is just great. How could anyone resist being loved up by such kind and gentle words!

I also like the idea in principle of the light touch...guys so often misunderstand power and think it is all muscle and tough heavy stuff. yet there are other kinds of power as your poem shows.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

I feel like dancing now...something mellow that I can sway to...if I wasn't already in love, I would have been when I finished reading this...wow and I guess wow just really says it all for me. Thank you for sharing this with me, with everyone really. Do you think if we got the people who are fighting the wars to read this, they might all stop and go home, to dance and make love? I think it's possible....oh, and well, of course, another People's g. Riot for my Favorites....

[Brett Campaigne]

the movement of(f) your line breaks, and your free flowing but well disciplined rhythm give a soft voice to your words, so that the reader can hear a voice from their memory; speak.

[Shadow]

It's Amazing what love can do and how it can make us feel


Nicely written and worded though the flow of it kept tripping me up maybe I'm just reading it wrong