White Wolves....Black Wolves... they all mean different things... but when a black and a white wolf come together to create something known as mysterious and dangerous....
Well I believe you have a good imagination and maybe a pretty good idea here. Unfortunately the amount of grammatical errors, fragmented thoughts and misused words make following your story difficult at best. Then I noticed that you seem to waver on whether you're writing about realistic canines or total fantasy ones. The story appears to start out more or less realistically or at least that was the first impression but by the last chapter your animals are not only talking among themselves but apparently can be understood by humans as well.
However try not to get discouraged by this. The best way to become a writer is to keep writing. Writing is both a journey and a learning experience. Perhaps the best thing to do is to read a couple of good books on writing itself to get a better idea of how to better put your thoughts together in the writing word.
I'd like to recommend a couple of books that I personally found very helpful.
1. “You Can Write a Mystery” by Gillian Roberts. Never mind the fact that this is geared towards mystery writing since in many ways all genres require the same knowledge of the mechanics of the craft. Of all the 'How To' books I've read on the subject I've found this one to be one of the most concise and helpful.
2. “Worlds of Wonder” by David Gerrold. This is a book for Sci-Fi and Fantasy authors but again what it has to offer will benefit whatever type of story you want to write.
3. Strunk & White, The Elements of Style. Is a book that should be on every author's reference shelf. It's a small book that provides a quick look up for most of the most common grammatical rules and styles in the English language.
Now as for your wolves. You need to decide or perhaps I should say you need to convince your readers just what level of reality your characters exist in. If they're supposed to be primarily realistic, then you have to keep to that reality throughout your story. If they're more on the fantasy side then you're more free to play with how they act, but it's a really good idea to establish this near the beginning of the story and then stick to it.
Okay, perhaps I''ve rambled on enough for one post. I hope I've been able to help a bit.
Keep writing
-JT
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much for this. So many people always encourage me but never tell me wha I've done wrong.. read moreThank you so much for this. So many people always encourage me but never tell me wha I've done wrong, so i really appreciate you taking the time to write this.
You see i have a really bad habit of never rereading my writing over, so i never fix the mistakes I've made. Frozen Bridge was the first piece that I've actually written it in a book by hand than written it into the computer, but i added a lot to it when i was writing it onto the computer so it may have a few errors.
But many thanks for this, and I'll try to fix these as soon as i can!
9 Years Ago
Good for you. One of the best lessons I've gotten from all the books I've read over the years on h.. read moreGood for you. One of the best lessons I've gotten from all the books I've read over the years on how to write is that writing is re-writing.
Most books will recommend that when you're creating your first draft you should write it all the way through without bothering about spelling, grammar or even coming up with names for places, people or things (unless you've already have them). Then ONLY after you've finished it. Gotten the entire story down written and written out do you go back and begin the process of re-writing.
As you're reading your word you should also get in the habit of reading them out loud to see how they sound. If your sentences don't flow easily off your tongue then chances are they won't read smoothly either.
When I wrote the Hellmouth, I'd actually finished the first draft in about ten days, which was almost a week ago. Then for the next five or six days, I re-read it in its entirety almost once a day, and re-wrote it added to it and took parts away until I could read it and not run across any mistakes or points that didn't fit. This is really what real writing it about. Dreaming up characters, plots and stories, that's the fun part. Then comes the real work of creation when rough ideas are forged into proper orderly form.
Well I believe you have a good imagination and maybe a pretty good idea here. Unfortunately the amount of grammatical errors, fragmented thoughts and misused words make following your story difficult at best. Then I noticed that you seem to waver on whether you're writing about realistic canines or total fantasy ones. The story appears to start out more or less realistically or at least that was the first impression but by the last chapter your animals are not only talking among themselves but apparently can be understood by humans as well.
However try not to get discouraged by this. The best way to become a writer is to keep writing. Writing is both a journey and a learning experience. Perhaps the best thing to do is to read a couple of good books on writing itself to get a better idea of how to better put your thoughts together in the writing word.
I'd like to recommend a couple of books that I personally found very helpful.
1. “You Can Write a Mystery” by Gillian Roberts. Never mind the fact that this is geared towards mystery writing since in many ways all genres require the same knowledge of the mechanics of the craft. Of all the 'How To' books I've read on the subject I've found this one to be one of the most concise and helpful.
2. “Worlds of Wonder” by David Gerrold. This is a book for Sci-Fi and Fantasy authors but again what it has to offer will benefit whatever type of story you want to write.
3. Strunk & White, The Elements of Style. Is a book that should be on every author's reference shelf. It's a small book that provides a quick look up for most of the most common grammatical rules and styles in the English language.
Now as for your wolves. You need to decide or perhaps I should say you need to convince your readers just what level of reality your characters exist in. If they're supposed to be primarily realistic, then you have to keep to that reality throughout your story. If they're more on the fantasy side then you're more free to play with how they act, but it's a really good idea to establish this near the beginning of the story and then stick to it.
Okay, perhaps I''ve rambled on enough for one post. I hope I've been able to help a bit.
Keep writing
-JT
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much for this. So many people always encourage me but never tell me wha I've done wrong.. read moreThank you so much for this. So many people always encourage me but never tell me wha I've done wrong, so i really appreciate you taking the time to write this.
You see i have a really bad habit of never rereading my writing over, so i never fix the mistakes I've made. Frozen Bridge was the first piece that I've actually written it in a book by hand than written it into the computer, but i added a lot to it when i was writing it onto the computer so it may have a few errors.
But many thanks for this, and I'll try to fix these as soon as i can!
9 Years Ago
Good for you. One of the best lessons I've gotten from all the books I've read over the years on h.. read moreGood for you. One of the best lessons I've gotten from all the books I've read over the years on how to write is that writing is re-writing.
Most books will recommend that when you're creating your first draft you should write it all the way through without bothering about spelling, grammar or even coming up with names for places, people or things (unless you've already have them). Then ONLY after you've finished it. Gotten the entire story down written and written out do you go back and begin the process of re-writing.
As you're reading your word you should also get in the habit of reading them out loud to see how they sound. If your sentences don't flow easily off your tongue then chances are they won't read smoothly either.
When I wrote the Hellmouth, I'd actually finished the first draft in about ten days, which was almost a week ago. Then for the next five or six days, I re-read it in its entirety almost once a day, and re-wrote it added to it and took parts away until I could read it and not run across any mistakes or points that didn't fit. This is really what real writing it about. Dreaming up characters, plots and stories, that's the fun part. Then comes the real work of creation when rough ideas are forged into proper orderly form.
'Do not pity yourself. If you wallow in self pity, life will be an endless nightmare' ~ Dazai Osamu
I'm a loner .o./
Guess i should write something other than that, hey? :p. Ok lets see, I pers.. more..