Forever

    Softly and sweetly, he pressed his lips against mine. My heart fluttered and I smiled through my kiss. He felt it and smiled as well. Oh how amazing I felt, how he felt. His hands were on my waist, warm on the skin just under the bottom of my shirt. His chest was against mine, his entire body pressed lightly against me. My hands were wrapped around his neck, my eyes closed.
    Softly, sweetly. Deeply.
    Our lips moved together at a careful pace, slow and passionate. My heart pounded against my chest, and I was sure he could feel it. Slowly we both backed up to sit on the couch. He sat down and I straddled him, kissing him still. He pulled me closer and I felt the desperation in his lips.
    We were perfectly harmonized. Our breathing matched, our lips moved together as if they were dancing, no one off beat at all. Everything was perfect; the low lighting in the room, the taste of his breath, the softness of his mouth.
    “I love you,” he whispered, “and I will forever.” I paused for a moment. “What’s wrong?”
    “Someone else promised me the same thing,” I said quietly, avoiding his gaze. He kissed me again.
    “Well I promise you that forever does exist, and I’ll prove it to you. I’ll never hurt you like he did.” I smiled at him.
    “Cross your heart?”
    “And hope to die.” He stroked my cheek lovingly. “Let’s go watch some TV before bed.”
    “Sounds good to me.” We stood and he leant me a pair of boxers and a shirt to change into before we crawled under the covers. I watched the snow falling outside of the window and was glad to be cuddling in the warmth of my love’s arms.
    I rested my head on his chest and he turned on the TV. I nuzzled my head under his chin, taking in his warmth as he wrapped his arms around me. I listened to his heartbeat and felt his fingers delicately trace small circles on my back.
    We didn’t talk much, just enjoyed each other’s company. We didn’t need to talk though, everything that needed to be said was indicated by the way we held each other, the way we occasionally stared into each other’s eyes. All was well with the world.
    When I started to drift off, I gave his waist a small hug-like squeeze. “I’ll love you forever,” I whispered. He kissed the top of my head.
    “I’ll love you forever too, and I’ll do whatever it takes to prove to you that it exists. I’ll never abuse your love or trust, and I’ll never hurt you.” I closed my eyes and opened them slowly.
    “I wish I could repay you, for all you’ve done for me.”
    “Just having you in my arms is enough payment.” I giggled.
    “How sappy.”
    “How true.” I looked up at him and kissed him before closing my eyes.
    “Goodnight,” I said, my voice trailing.
    “Goodnight.”

I woke up and looked to my right. There was no one there, my love was just a figment of a dream. No one was there for me to prove me wrong, and no one was there to restore my faith in love. I was alone. I was always alone.

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Courtney Shaddock

 

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Tony]

Well, I think you have a yourself a great little story. And one of those dreams we all hate to wake from.
As I read along, I was taken away into the story, yet as usual, mentally cataloging possible endings.....
As a salute to your writing skills, I was surprised at the end.

[xxcatie09]

fantastic...it's like the perfect dream...now we just have to find it in reality

[Chellie]

I love the discription and the sweetness of this story. The part where she is explaining that she doesn't need words to express her feelings was great. The ending was a bit of a shocker, but it also seems to fit the story. I think that if you really wanted to, you could write a much longer story for this, possibly even a book. It would be a good read as the reader finds out why and who promised her forever, and then broke that promise, and also why she is having this dream about a guy she may or may not know, and if it works out between them. Just a suggestion from someone who thinks that about just about every short stroy. But I guess there short for a reason.

[WriterMe]

I loved the ending. Maybe a little overly- sweet for my taste, but I still really liked it. I think you could have made the ending better though. The despair she feels when she realized it was all a dream and she was still inconceivably alone.
But otherwise I think it was really good =]

--Niki