No. 5

No. 5

A Poem by Pen Draggin'

 To walk amongst the wood with fingers entwined
on a Northwestern eve in early June;
watch the umber in your eyes as they shine
with the sunlight that softly transudes through.
To bury our toes in warm Grecian sands
while your curls tickle a crescent moon breast;
nothing but laughter and love in our hands
as twilight rolls in waves from the west.
To witness artic circle endless days,
the snow fall in the phosphorescent sun,
and the selfish frost bites my tongue away
so the rustling fir trees will speak my lust.
For without you these worlds would cease to be,
simply my own empty eternity.

© 2009 Pen Draggin'


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My favorite lines are are the last two. "For without you these worlds would cease to be, simply my own empty eternity."

I can sympathize with that feeling deeply, it's amazing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


It's funny how one of my poems got reviewed again after a long time and how its ending lines have a lot in common with the closing words of this poem of yours in which I bumped quite by chance one minute after.
Here I feel a profound effort to disclose the meaningfulness of creation around us, which is always a delightful, silent call for deepening our understanding of the multilayered relationship between us and the majesty of nature.
A piece made of delicate yet powerful imagery and sensibility.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Why don't I have a longhand copy of this from you?

Posted 15 Years Ago


I have this written longhand from you and I still love it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Outstanding poem,very touching and the flow is very good,nice work!

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

this is good stuff here. its the yen to my yang.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a beautiful write...and a lovely imagery! loved the ending...

"For without you these worlds would cease to be,
simply my own empty eternity."

such powerful words! so beautiful...so true!

a lovely piece! i liked it!

regards
barricade...

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Pen Draggin'
Pen Draggin'

Portland, OR



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Hi! I'm Kelsey, I'm 22 years old with a passion for poetry. I write because it is innate and, quite simply, I'm pretty f*****g good at it. I love the rain. I will always belong to the Northwest. I sa.. more..

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