Forever Lost in October's Storm

 

Forever Lost in October's Storm   When the wind blows through the willow tree and thunder starts to peal, there's a memory that calls to me and melts my heart of steel. In the deepest cold of winter's night, she came into my life; she soon came to be my springtime bloom, my sunshine, and my wife. As the summer days of wedded bliss brought joy much more than pain, she delighted in the smallest things--- the sea, the sand, the rain. Just to look again across the world through eyes that smiled with glee was the blessing to my weary soul that set my feelings free. In the autumn, willows sadly weep; their leaves fall down like tears. In a dark October thunderstorm, I lost my love so dear. Does it matter to the multitudes or just to this old man that I'd give my life and all I own to have her back again? As the years have slowly stumbled by, my heart still bleeds each morn; and the sun that sets each lonely night still sees a heart that's torn. When the wind blows through the willow tree and thunder starts to peal, it is in the lightning's sudden flash she's here and I can feel. By Sharon Miller Bolander   © 2008 Sharon Miller Bolander (All rights reserved)

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I like form some of the time as it seems a good discipline, and reassuring, especially after writing in a wild, loose sort of way. I like your 8 verses of 4 lines ballad form (though some of the first lines are one over the eight) Also the subject of the storm and great loss is ideal for ballad form. Your rhyme works well throughout and there is a cracking atmosphere in the poem and of course sadness. I went for this poem on account of the dramatic title and was not disappointed. Enjoyed the read.

[Emily Rose]

Interesting how you take on the persona of the male and not the female - a very clever poetic exercise on your part. As usual, the rhyme, rhythm and meter were all solid, and your imagery was lovely too.

[None]

What a beautifully written poem. I get a sense of spirit between the lines that gives such life to your writing and genuine feeling. You touched my heart with your creation.

[Suelou]

Absolutely beautiful, Sharon.