If I Were A Dragon

If I could choose my time again I'd come back as a dragon so I could be the most powerful figment of your imagination
My swim up stream would result in the most amazing transformation
They'd paint tales of my journey and see me in every constellation
My legend would span every continent and culture

I'd be the guardian purched high in front of your kingdom
People would admire me for my strength and for my wisdom
My voice would boom so loud it'd shake the clouds and be something to be admired
With every breathe so strong I'd breathe f*****g fire!
I'd fly through the clouds with the ultimate sense of freedom
and bring faith to everyone below me with nothing left to redeem them
My heart would be filled with contentment
I'd let by gones be by gones and I'd be so focussed and in the moment that there'd be no time for resentment
I'd share the warmth of my den with others who spend too much time freezing
and we wouldn't need to say a word
We'd just lay by the fire admiring it's glow and be happy that we're all alive and breathing
I'd inspire you to think with your head and your heart
The pattern of the scales on my body would be so unique and mesmerising they'd call it art
I'd be the symbol of longevity and people would pray to me for good fortune
but all the gold in the world wouldn't amount to how rich I'd be because I'd have you
As a dragon I'd do all the things that I'm not able
I"ll just write it down where it'll stay as a fable
That dragon's the best parts of me that you could've known
But instead it sleeps quietly while you turn it to stone

Reviews

[Sharon Kim]

Peejay, I really like the way you captured the image of the dragon-the magic and pure awesomeness! I felt sadness at the end thinking that the dragon parts are stone because of someone not believing in you!

If I were to change anything I would change the word f**king. I don't think that it adds to your poem. I actually think it takes away from it-just my opinion!

(also I think purched should be perched)

Great write! I enjoyed it!
Sharon

[Peejay]

Thanks for the review Sharon! I appreciate your constructive criticism. I don't intend to you curse words lightly or regularly. It's definitely one of those things that people either like or dislike so there was definitely that risk there of it taking away from the poem and thank you for the spellig correct haha. I'll keep that in mind for next time :)

[Peejay]

use curse words*

[Sharon Kim]

You're welcome. As for the curse word, I can totally see it as an expression of strength or adrenaline.. I think the word threw me a little because as I was reading this, in the literal sense of a dragon, I can see this being geared towards younger kids who could imagine themselves as dragons.. I think your poem is great!

[zaneybear]

I personally like the use of the word f*****g in that sense, because it talks about you being strong., and tat word is a very vulgar and strong swear word so it sort of makes sense in that line, very well done:)

[Peejay]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you appreciated it :)