Love it! It's powerful. This, this "water" is something more than just water. it means a lot, and your words are intricately woven, clearly not as a mistake. I don't see how you could not admire your own work when it's this good. The story behind what you wrote is not in my knowledge bank, which creates many, many ideas in my head, and I'm in love with the way you created this. The beginning is relating to the reader, asking questions without the obvious question marks everywhere, and in the "have you ever" style, wow, i really like this. "I tae a sip more. Enlightened. Filled with lust and joy. Though it quickly fades." LOVE. Awesome write.
I really like this one, the title is what made me want to read it. I don't see why you don't like it though, its a flawless piece! The meaning is very strong and the wording is powerful. Good write(:
Love it! It's powerful. This, this "water" is something more than just water. it means a lot, and your words are intricately woven, clearly not as a mistake. I don't see how you could not admire your own work when it's this good. The story behind what you wrote is not in my knowledge bank, which creates many, many ideas in my head, and I'm in love with the way you created this. The beginning is relating to the reader, asking questions without the obvious question marks everywhere, and in the "have you ever" style, wow, i really like this. "I tae a sip more. Enlightened. Filled with lust and joy. Though it quickly fades." LOVE. Awesome write.
Hi. I'm Eileen. I'm 16 and a junior in high school.
I am an artist, a past passion of mine was writing. Thought I am currently more involved in the visual arts.
I play guitar, flute, ukulele, a.. more..