Spring Storm

A powerful storm, and it's beautiful aftermath...

Spring Storm

Trees are bent -- some are broken,
Flowers pelted by the rain.
Winds sweep away words spoken,
Rattling the window pane.

Dark clouds surround my world,
Thunder booms and quakes.
Vulnerable leaves are swirled,
Down the glass crawl water snakes.

Lightning jumps, electrifies,
Heavy rain drops spatter
Now the storm intensifies,
Causing birds to scatter.

Wind whips and the flag snaps
Storm slowly passing on;
Flowers wilted and collapsed,
Sun appears, bright as dawn.

Colorful birds happily chirp,
Flowers rise to meet the sun.
Loosening its fateful grip,
Finally, the storm is done.

Author's Note

Is there any way you can think of that I can add to this? I would like to expand on the imagery.

Reviews

[Gee]

Hi, personality I would have led off with verse 2, followed by 3, then 1, 4, 5. As is you've started with storm damage, then introduced the storm to then add further damage and finally the lull. Enjoyed nonetheless

[AustinDF]

I think you're painting an image well but I think you can tell more of a story to keep the reader engaged.

[PeacefulPieces]

Hi, Austin. Do you have any suggestions on how I can do that? I had a feeling it wasn't quite "complete" but I'm not sure how to expand on it. Thanks!

[AustinDF]

Try to find some kind of moral or something along those lines, leave the reader with an image to remember a wisdom by.

[PeacefulPieces]

That's great! I really appreciate your feedback. :-)