Acid

Just a blend of science and emotions

I feel the acid slowly trickling down my esophagus

Reacting slowly with the little drops of water in my cells

Burning my throat, my skin 

Slowly spreading to reveal the pink flesh inside

The blood, thick and red, oozes out

As the acid continues its journey.

It reaches my heart, my oh so feeble heart

My heart, so scarred and distorted, now burns in fire

The fire cannot be put out by carbon dioxide

It need way more than that

But it keeps on pumping still,

Spreading the acid all over my body through my weak veins

I feel them slowly tearing apart as the acid spreads.

The acid has now reached my fingertips,

A similar burning in my toes

My whole body is on fire

Its burning with a fire so intense

That it makes sure not a single part of me exists

It is going to carry on until I turn to ashes

But ain't I even smaller than a tiny speck of ash?
 

I stare at you with my burning eyes,

It's funny how your words are like acid.

Author's Note

Put a lot of effort on this. What do you think?

Reviews

[BLANKSK]

Thank you for the review. This piece is lovely. I love acid as a metaphor for painful words, corroding every inch of you. That's really, really strong.

[Lonely Islander]

Thanks a lot:-):-):-D.

[T*Fuyumi]

Oh my goodness! Upon reading the very last line, I was taken aback when I realized how you represented those "words" with "acid"! I'm thoroughly pleased and satisfied reading this poem! ^^

[Lonely Islander]

Thank you so much...it really means a lot:-):-):-D.

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Very interesting. I agree with Pax in the beautiful imagery you have bestowed us with. Great job and effort :)

[Lonely Islander]

thanks cord:-):-):-D.

[Pax]

your efforts was not in waste...this is great.
i see alot of imagery used...
well done.

[Lonely Islander]

thank you so much:-):-):-D.

[RachelReaper]

whoa! gore central park!!!! I loved this, many people don't incorperate scientific voacbulary into this, and it was a very creative idea that you did. The images I got in my head seemed to flow like special effects in a movie.

[Lonely Islander]

thanks a alot...it really means so much reaper:-):-):-D.

[RachelReaper]

anytime