One Drop

 

i

am

one.

hers.

alone

i wait.

soon i’m

joined by

others who

will share the

same  fate…we

wait  together as

the realization of yet

another broken dream

emerges. she knows this

mood  all too well. it has

been her  friend, as have

we.  we who wait. as the

torrent inevitably begins,

we are liberated, upon

 burning cheeks

we fall.

Author's Note

something i was messing with...not sure if it's really working

Reviews

[Frances O'Neill]

The idea is superb! This is a nice ,little story!

[Maria Retz]

This is amazing. The tear drop is perfect and the poem is great
Excelent job

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

a perfect tear drop. I love these shape poetry. You have done a really fine one here. Thanks for entering my contest.


The poem sounds great too.

[Rain Bo]

Very cool idea. And you somehow constructed that tear drop of words perfectly.

Good job. :)

[Lori]

I don't think I've ever seen tear drops personified. Very cool. Very touching. I love this thought of tears conspiring to get released to freedom, and with it comes relief for the her in the poem.

[bluessadmood]

wow so nice and new,you tell of tear drops when sad and feeling low they gather in a torrent and drop steadily on weeping cheeks,this is different you tell of tears and emotion in words stuffed just like a tear ,nice thought