What's his face.

What's his face.

A Poem by Pay

When you came back my heart pounded like drums in a marching band
When I first felt your hand my pulse stopped.
When I first hugged you I died in your arms
When I first kissed you my lips fell off my body.
Your my everything
My life
My love
My world
Without you I'm notthing
With you I'm something
You make me Stronger in everyway.
I love you more then anything.

© 2010 Pay


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"When you came back(,) my heart pounded like drums in a marching band" The coma is in () where it is supposed to be.
"When I first felt your hand(,) my pulse stopped." The coma is in () where it is supposed to be.
"When I first hugged you(,) I died in your arms"Coma in the ()
"When I first kissed you() my lips fell off my body." again coma
"Without you(,) I'm notthing" Coma. and "Nothing" not notthhing.
"With you(,) I'm something" Coma.
"I love you more then anything." "more than anything"

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Added on November 28, 2010
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Pay
Pay

panama city beach , FL



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Hi im 14 and im a very youing poet, i never new how to get my feelings out poetry has helped me alot my sister has inspired me the most to do it. Im very emotinal and this helps alot checkout my poem.. more..

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