"You're wise to deal with your Shadow
sabotaging grace
It's not a threat, just a bad sow
unawakened face
Ain't no recalcitrant demon
just your woolly head
So get a clue, get a beam on
shift your sight instead"
Love this verse , reminds me of Don Juan, if you see Evil stop looking at it !
Thats where it gets it power. A powerful statement
~Raven
Posted 16 Years Ago
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Nice job, I like the words you used in this piece, i will have to listen to the song to get the full effect. I did have to read it a couple of times because i would get lost, but the beginning is my favorite. Keep on writing
Laceyjane
No. I reread and then read again. This is very good and to follow it really gives insight. You can erase all the blather in my review. Very good. Thanks very much...raining
Okay then, Ezra Pound.... you jump fast into the everywhere without waiting sometimes. On a high wire is so complete a metaphore (is there an e at the end of metaphor) that it makes cold fingers of partial sweat run down the magic kingdom of an alleged heart. You seem to have much genius. It exudes and dialates and all of that stuff.
You are the fingernails breadth away from wallace stevens zen park and ride. (or something like that) You have an alleged heart. you have everything. You are a better writer than I am. However, since I am over here and looking at this with (my direct pointing) eyes, I see that you must back up some.
Is any of this makeing sense. Gary Snyder, maybe that is where you might wish to go in your writing next. Go look at some rocks on a mountain.
I am being bombastic. s**t. didn't mean to. good poem good poem.... don't take me wrong. This is very good. If I had written it I would dance around the kitchen in my socks and underwear screaming and crying with laughter but I just have a feeling.... you need to trade in your word-set again. Moult.
LIke a siren of Delphi I see without knowing. It is telling me (It?) that you must now go a new place in your writing. Thanks, raining
I like the choice of words and I like the way it sounded I just wish I was smart enough to know what it really meant, forgive me because I'm a laymen! lol
Overall I liked it.
Another great song write, enjoyed very much. I will always look to the big man upstairs when things are tough because sometimes things get beyond our control. Nicely penned. Thanks for sharing! PW
You're wise to deal with your Shadow
sabotaging grace
It's not a threat, just a bad sow
unawakened face
Ain't no recalcitrant demon
just your woolly head
So get a clue, get a beam on
shift your sight instead
Awesome song! like it and i love these words here, this is a wonderful write, love is so hard to understand we never know we have it unless it waslks away.
I haven't listened to the song yet, but they lyrics are great. I like the part about being wise to deal with your shadow. So many people are afraid to face their shadow maybe due to shame, fear of condemnation or whatever. And many of those that do face the shadow blame it on those 'recalcitrant demons' in order to avoid taking responsibility for it. It is vital to 'shift your sight instead.' So many people run to therapy to deal with the shadows yet you can participate in all the therapy in the world, but if you aren't willing to engage in introspection and changing the way you see things and work on changing your thoughts, you aren't going to get anywhere. And heck, if you are willing to be introspective, you probably don't even need the therapy, and it's a lot cheaper!
Okay okay
I am going over to listen to the WHOLE SONG on the playlist now...haha
Sorry it took me so long to get a review back to you
Sense these are lyrics I really must go listen LISTEN to the SONG ...haha
Cheers,lea
This was a tough one for me...tough i must say, i have to tell u about this 'one' thing, but will have to do it in a msg....
I think if one looks within and believes in the power of love and self...one can find what no other can tell or give...therefore making the tea leaves more significant! ;-)
btw...that was some great strumming in the bridge! ;-)
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