Closer to Her

Can it get closer...

She sees in me, as her hair I settle,
Blinking her eyes like lovely petals,
May be she'll love me, may be not,
Well, she will still live within me, as my heart.

- Pawan Painjane

Blog - pawanpainjanenotes.wordpress.com

Book - Love in Life's Farm

Reviews

[Draven]

I will say that the grammar and such needs cleaned up a bit. But otherwise I am very impressed. I like how you used that last piece, the last two lines. So beautiful. The expression of such curiosity and love and the way you said it was fantastic. I can't get over how great those last two lines are. You wrote a novel out of two lines. Great job! : )

[Pawan Painjane]

Thanks Casanova!

I hope you enjoy my other writings too.