Falling Through the Lies

Sometimes its hard to decipher truth from lies...

Hearts are made to be broken,

Tears are made to cry,

Wrists are made for cutting,

People are made to die,

Wars are made for peace,

Kids are meant to kill,

Girls are meant to be raped,

And governments promote God's will.

Why do you bother?

Every word is a lie.

Poision shoots from your lips,

Why do you even try?

Boxes are made to live in,

Money is made to hoard,

Countries are made to die for,

Oil is meant to lord.

Blood is meant to spill,

Cars are made to crash,

Food is meant to starve for,

Sorry if my words are rash.

But the people can't live

A life that is fake.

Why do you bother?

Why do you lie?

Hearts are meant to be filled!

People are meant to fly!

Flying high with your hidden lies,

Soaring above the clouds,

Then screaming as you break my wings,

And I crash toward the ground.

And as I fall I pass,

Every lie I've been taught,

And I realize that it is you I should have fought.

Why do you bother?

Every word is a lie.

Poision shoots from your lips,

Maybe people -

                are meant to die.

                                ~by Pauline Marie Daley

         November 5th, 2008

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I like it. Great title. The title put its arm round me and drew me in. I like the broken glass crunchiness of the poem. I also thought, lets get through all the truthes and lies, move beyond them all. Lies have their place just as much as truthes, don't they? Lies can be our friends. Sometimes lies are all some people have. And how many times do people say what is the truth? So lies are fascinating concepts. Your poem makes me think. If a lie will ride with us when a truth will not...lets ride! I wonder how many of us pass a day without telling the odd lie. Life wld collapse without lies and liars. Also it would be immeasurably duller.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Powerful poem here...

[Antonio Valentino]

Yeah, maybe a lot of them, lets go get them!

Pauline this is amazing!
Don't ever lose this gift of courage and sense of truth.

You're pretty special you know that?
Great job!

Antonio

[Hviske]

This is awesome . i loved it ... its true its ironic its great

[Damian Alan Gray]

A poignant piece, and one that I'm sure deserves some voice time. I liked the overall message of the poem, but I suggest that you concentrate on free verse, rather than rhyme. It will get your meaning across without having to ensure that every other line matches the other. Rhyming, though making for fun reads, and having a place of its own, is not really meant for socially affecting poetry. Beyond that, rhyming a socially impacting poem brings the significance down and leaves the poem wanting for a spark to bring it to life.

It's obvious that you have the talent. Don't undersell that talent by killing your voice.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Incredible write! This is the first piece I've read from you but I'm vastly impressed! Your style is conventional, but your wordplay is exceptional and very intelligent!!!!

ard,

Countries are made to die for,
Oil is meant to lord.
Blood is meant to spill,
Cars are made to crash,
Food is meant to starve for,
Sorry if my words are rash.

Dope! Your lines are incredible! I love every subjects meaning! Very smart write! I'm snapping my fingers in applause!!!

[R J Askew]

I know I've already read this, but the title drew me in again. This time my reaction to line three was a profound, very strong no, no, no! I suppose it just shows that we react differently to things depending on the moment we experience them.

[:)Hannah~!]

That is sooooo true. That was a wonderful write. I think everybody thinks about that sometimes. AWESOME WRITE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LOL,
Hannah

[Rain]

All the truths I thought I knew as a child have changed. I suppose that is called the loss of innocence. This poem poem reflects the realization of that loss. I love your insight in this piece, but I still feel there is more good than bad in the world...more good human beings than bad. But, your work cannot be denied. Great piece. Rain..

[Blake Q Hatfield]

Well done. It's a frank depiction of the harsher side of life. Sometimes we like to hide from these parts of life, but this puts it right in the readers face. It raises the question of why do we strive and try, something we should always contemplate.