She fell and broke her life People rushed to help It was touch and go for a time The surgeon had to amputate But he was finally removed The recovery was long Sometimes she felt he was still there Touching her inside Messing with her head They said this would happen Such intensity is bound to leave scars But they would heal Someday another would come along She would be stronger.
This is a brilliantly crafted message with parallel meanings. One of your best & I relate to it very much becuz I had phantom sensations of being able to walk when I was unable to walk for a few years. I love the way you state things in a way that encompasses both viewpoints, as a person losing a limb . . . or cutting off a leech that's dragging someone down. It's so true, we still have those dumb throes of being with someone, after it's over, even if it was bad. So true to life! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Hope this didn't bring back bad times, Margie.
Yeah, you can never quite get rid of people.
Ouch ! Phantom Pains.... you can remove the Physical but there is a spirit/light body just underneath it and it still remains intact and feels everything. Physical scars can heal but the light body can never be casted away or forget the experience of the physical body.. Lesson.... tread lightly on experience.
There is a very slight chance that I might be wrong here but, and tis a big but or BUT... I think this is fantastic............cheers & thanks indeed, not necessarily in that order.....Neville
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
It must happen a lot to some.
Never get in to deep.
love the metaphor here...we can remove the pain, remove the limb of heart, but then we feel that it is still there even when it's not...
hopefully she will be strong enough to love on her own, even as an amputee..
j.
Great first line-“She fell and broke her life”. Stunning. The entire poem is unique, original and filled with memorable lines that explode with the impact of a Code Red. Metaphor is so on-point. Her love was a head-on collision. Amputations with phantom pains of heartache. So glad the patient lived. This poem is superb Paul.
I like poetry and stories that tell me something.
Sometimes the shortest poems hit the hardest.
If I post something serious, don't worry, a funny poem will follow. Don't hesitate to tell me if my po.. more..