The Room

The room was in darkness
Save for the solitary shard of light
Shining directly onto that point on the wall
The blood had dried in long back
If the room could speak
There would be screams
The chains still hung on the wall
Frozen in time
A timely reminder
To the events of that day
She touched them
Just to understand
Why
She expected the feel of cold metal
Instead, a strange heat surged through her body
Compelling her into the chains
Tightly binding her against the wall
Trapped, she waited
He was watching her
Listening as her heart pounded in fear
Just the beginning
She thought she was screaming
As the blood entered her mouth, slowly
Forcing her eyes to scream
Her mind now drowning in panic
As life began to fade
He watched her, fascinated as she entered the next phase
The journey into the afterlife
Just like the others
The room was in darkness
Save for the solitary shard of light
Shining directly onto that point on the wall.

Reviews

[BBP]

So cryptic and creepy, but so softly written. I loved it. The twist on her already being dead was weaved in perfectly.

[Paul Bell]

How did i know you would like this.

[Island Hippy]

Chilling read, a murdery scene. Repeating the opening line at the end is brilliant! Warm up for Halloween.

[Paul Bell]

I'll be sneaking up on you. Just throw nuts at me.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Incredible!
It just created a spooky sensation in me.
I think it's about death; an abandoned house; afterlife.
It hooked me...
"Forcing her eyes to scream
Her mind now drowning in panic"
I salute your creativity.

[Paul Bell]

You sure are right. It's all those things.

[Rogerh]

Really eerie poem. I enjoyed every word.

[Paul Bell]

Getting to that time of year again.

[wordman]

reminded me of the valentines day massacre,you can still see the blood stains on the brick wall

[Paul Bell]

Quite a lot of blood if i remember right.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I wonder why there are more men serial killers than woman...do you really think that most of them start from mommy issues like research claims? I just dont know about that ....daddy issues are just as bad. creepy write Paul....interesting but creepy...

[Paul Bell]

I think you've hit the nail on the head. It definitely is mummy issues. Though women tend to poison their victims.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Warning- Not for the faint-at-heart! Macabre, Poe-esque, downright blood-curdling words & imagery-"forcing her eyes to scream"- agghh! Love the repetition of lines beginning&end- adds much to the haunting feel. Murder? Something else? Darkly Brilliant Paul!

[Paul Bell]

Thinking ahead to Halloween, Annette. lol

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Exactly fitting Paul!

[Ayvid N]

I read it out aloud and was afraid. Lust became a morbid game of death crossing the line of restraint. Some blood curdling lines here Paul. Yet I couldn't help enjoying it.

[Paul Bell]

The point of no return. Lust, the ultimate game.

[Ayvid N]

And she had no rifle...

[Paul Bell]

She'll remember that in her next life. lol