The Room

The room was in darkness
Save for the solitary shard of light
Shining directly onto that point on the wall
The blood had dried in long back
If the room could speak
There would be screams
The chains still hung on the wall
Frozen in time
A timely reminder
To the events of that day
She touched them
Just to understand
Why
She expected the feel of cold metal
Instead, a strange heat surged through her body
Compelling her into the chains
Tightly binding her against the wall
Trapped, she waited
He was watching her
Listening as her heart pounded in fear
Just the beginning
She thought she was screaming
As the blood entered her mouth, slowly
Forcing her eyes to scream
Her mind now drowning in panic
As life began to fade
He watched her, fascinated as she entered the next phase
The journey into the afterlife
Just like the others
The room was in darkness
Save for the solitary shard of light
Shining directly onto that point on the wall.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Very clever. Perhaps the story sometimes is the story after all

[Paul Bell]

Probably not far off. How are you doing.

[Lyn Anderson]

Still above ground

[Paul Bell]

Lol, the words my accountant said to me.

[andrew mitchell]

Supernatural macabre write indeed Paul. Nicely written.

[Paul Bell]

Good for hallowean. lol

[Nigel Newman]

Aah. And I thought it was someone 'just' visiting a place where torture had taken place and trying to picture how it must have been. Then the twist.

Beautifully written Paul. I love the return to the opening phrases. And the choice of words and imagery were delightful in a macabre spooky way. One raised eyebrow was the two 'time' words so close together, but hey.

[Mrudula Rani]

The Room seems to be speaking of a crime scene, is it?

[Paul Bell]

I suppose it could. I was trying some supernatural writing for Halloween.

[Mrudula Rani]

Scary stuff! Exactly the kind that will prevent visitors during Halloween!

[barleygirl]

This message could be describing kinky sex or just plain ole life! Or maybe it's an anxiety/panic attack? Anyway, your analogy is far-reaching & well-expressed as the dread hiding around the most unlikely corners. Why do so many aspects of life have to include pain AND pleasure? *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

[Paul Bell]

This is just people visiting me. lol

[ROXANE DORSEY]

great line to me, drowning in panic. thanks for sharing the wonderful talent.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks Roxane. Hope the trick and treaters are kind to you.

[Mirror]

"Forcing her eyes to scream.."

There! It became scary for me from there. This is an amazing flow that keeps the reader reading. at the end, it sticks a picture one can not erase easily.

Great write!!!

[Paul Bell]

Don't you be getting scared tonight.

[Mirror]

lol! Nope, i won't be. Thanks for the concern anyways.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh my...this is haunting, gruesome, and eerie! Lydi**

[Paul Bell]

That time of year, Lydia.

[Neelam]

Horror depicted in a subtle way. Extraordinary!

[Paul Bell]

Haunting time.