Sacrifice

He bleeds, for he is weak
Tortured thoughts
He bleeds 
Preaches to the mild
So reverent in their eyes
Looking down, he sermons
The cross is bearing
Impure thoughts
He bleeds 
The thoughts get stronger
Penance for the soul
He touches his scars
Sacrificed for his lord
The prayers cleanse
He is pure
Gods chosen one
Standing before his flock
He sermons
They call to him
He sees her
The scars open.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of words and thoughts.
"He is pure
Gods chosen one
Standing before his flock"
I liked the above lines. To stand for the right. Isn't easy. Thank you Paul for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Paul Bell]

Thanks Coyote. Never quite got religion myself.

[Coyote Poetry]

Me either and you are welcome.

[Shabeeh Haider]

When you shed your blood for the one that you love then it is a supreme sacrifice. It could be a person, a belief or it could be for your country.
He loves his disciples and he loves his Lord. His is the ultimate sacrifice.
The ending gives a wonderful twist to the poem.
I would like to think it was his mother.

[Paul Bell]

I suppose the list could be wide.

[Ken Simm.]

Interesting and strong write that invites the reader to put their own interpretations on it. I see a priest tempted beyond endurance. Excellent stuff.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks Ken. Good to write without the page going mad with lines.

[Valentine]

Reading your explanation below, I have to say I did not see it as him cutting himself. I see a man before his flock, preaching but inside lusting for someone possibly not his own wife. Valentine

[Paul Bell]

Maybe his child.

[Jenny]

"He bleeds, for he is weak"

I love this as a first line

...I do have a question though... why did you say "He bleeds some more" later? I think saying "some more" takes away from the language thats you've already so beautifully put together in this poem. When I reread it (probably the fourth time lol) i just read "he bleeds"...
IDK just curious about your style because i absolutely enjoyed reading this

wonderful work
thank you for sharing

J

[Paul Bell]

I think i was trying to be subtle. He constantly cuts himself through guilt. But i think you're right. Bleeds tells it too. Present on the way.

[Jenny]

i dont know about being right but i was curious and since i really liked your writing i decided to ask :)

[Paul Bell]

Appreciate it.