'The Final Fall
Paul Bell,
These are words that remind of the fact that life is not all sweetness and light for many of us. It also shows the need for love and how important it is. Neediness can become all encompassing too. Working one's way out is the goal but not always found. Hard to read.
Blessings,
kathy
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
How you doing, Kathy. Yes, life is not always sweetness and light. If only couples took time to talk.. read moreHow you doing, Kathy. Yes, life is not always sweetness and light. If only couples took time to talk to each other.
5 Years Ago
I find writing like this a good wake up call not to take people for granted!
Blessings Paul a.. read moreI find writing like this a good wake up call not to take people for granted!
Blessings Paul as you keep sharing
Kathy
I think the plain language in this piece may make some think that it feels soulless, empty, methodical....but when I look into it, my soul cracks. It's like that hardened chocolate on the outside of ice cream ...it cracks...it comes of one lonely agonizing piece at a time. The richness of the chocolate is melted away and all you see is vanilla. I feel the fear here. I hear the torture of I don't deserve you. I know the misunderstanding of I can't love you cause I can't love me.I ve had the regret of not controlling it, being unable to save it...losing one...losing both. I'm babbling. This poem is packed full!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Love is so powerful. Seems you can't live with it, you can't live without it. Together in heaven.
Nice short simple steps down the long painful staircase into oblivion. Your somewhat soulless staccato drumbeat makes it seem as if none of this nonsense has any real feeling . . . it's just empty, shallow, mechanical steps down a predicable path for any two people who do this dance of unthinking mind torment. The best part of your poem is the pacing. I didn't think it would go this far down, but when it did, it wasn't surprising -- a rubber stamp of how it goes in life as we watch people going down the staircase . . .
Very sad but often some relations end this way. Very beautifully put in words.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thanks Shabeeh, where you been hiding.
8 Years Ago
Have been a but busy lately. Will try to be here more often.
It feels good to know that some .. read moreHave been a but busy lately. Will try to be here more often.
It feels good to know that some one noticed. :)
I like poetry and stories that tell me something.
Sometimes the shortest poems hit the hardest.
If I post something serious, don't worry, a funny poem will follow. Don't hesitate to tell me if my po.. more..