Love Smoke

I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and when those silver linings lose their sheen...we often don't notice, we just drown ourselves in whatever, and imbibe memories as if they were "right now"---

[Paul Bell]

God bless alcohol. The emergency elixir.

[Glen Weimann]

Beautifully told, Paul. I can only agree with Marvin.

[Paul Bell]

She'll be back, maybe.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

If a man cannot spend the rest of his life with the woman he loves, at least he is free to spend the rest of his life getting over her, one smooth drink at a time ... Nicely done, and true to life ...

[Paul Bell]

Just the bottle to play with.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Wow! This is so good. I love how you swung from the positive to the negative but found positivity in that. A silver lining always shines when viewed in the right light. Well done!

[Paul Bell]

Yeah he's definitely an optimist.

[apennylate]

A silver lining of sexy voice... The sign on your packet...? Red... Oh wait, maybe that is me, smoking can kill you, the blue certainly will... Profoundly penned...

[Paul Bell]

But what away to go.

[apennylate]

Right.....

[jellycat94]

This makes me feel like I'm sitting on a bar stool in this place, with the haze of cigarettes from more than one "lost soul in love" hanging in the air. I feel like I'm being nosy, observing him so closely to the point where even I feel the shock, when I vaguely hear the soft voice in his phone say "it's over." Ouch. I would buy him a drink, but he already has one. Oh well. You really pulled us in with this, amazing work!

[Paul Bell]

Sure he would take the drink off you. Though i've got a feeling you'd be making the same phone call as the last woman. lol

[duff]

Written with a clever hand. Rich in mystique. Layers deep to dive into. A great read and the title fits the rest.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks duff. I like the slow build up to it.

[duff]

Definitely. You're welcome Paul.

[pia]

Amazing poem...
Love the structure and its rhyme scheme
Thr imagery is great and the person youve portrayed here seems super romantic and deep
Yet seems to worry about how love does come with a price sometimes

[Paul Bell]

Thanks Pia. He is a bit of a lost soul in love.

[pia]

Lol alot of us can relate to that

[Kelly Scheppers]

...you draw her in, like the drag of a cigarette...romantic, indeed!

[Paul Bell]

He was quite romantic in an unromantic way. lol

[Kelly Scheppers]

...sounds like many a men I've known! ; )

[Paul Bell]

Men, what can you do with us.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...can't live with them, or without them!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Excellent imagery and cowboy-Kerouak style. Clean lines, self-deprecating, guarded but revealing emotional depth, "Christ how romantic I am". Love it,but remember- not every dangerous thing sports a warning label...Ha!

[Paul Bell]

Yet you would have thought with health and safety going mad now, it would be.