Love Smoke

I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Love Smoke"
Paul Bell,
Is it love or is it addiction; drug of choice? Interesting how much comfort people will "draw" from anything which gives any comfort, even a substitute. I know some relationships are better left to die, this must be one of them. Quite a poem.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Paul Bell]

Yeah, some just have to pass by.

[Mrudula Rani]

Five rings? Is it an Olympic sport?

[Paul Bell]

Was for him. The JD rally. lol

[lessa (kenzie)]

I love those last four lines, made me chuckle a bit. I really enjoyed your words.

[Paul Bell]

Hope I'm not encouraging you to smoke and drink.

[Alexa Apothic Red]

I LOVE this! It is definitely real and relevant. I also like the checking of the warning labels of cigarettes versus alcohol.. and you opt for the one that will eventually kill you according to them.. and how you mock the industry at being profound by warning of death. I also love the part that nearly seduced you, her soft sexy voice sending a tingle down your spine, but then the content she delivered of ending it abruptly was bewildering and you can tell that you are pissed and yet somewhere hopeful: "silver lining." Intense, visual writing. I like it!

[Paul Bell]

Man falls back on his best friend. JD. She was to good for him.

[Alexa Apothic Red]

I think that was definitely implied by the seductive quality of her voice and her impetuous breakup.

[Karen Redburn]

You are definitely a hard hitting poet, my friend. Another fantastic poem!

[Lucia]

"I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that"
hahaha I love that! this also makes me think of Bukowsky it's got good punch and it's witty

[Paul Bell]

Also tastes great.

[PandaPeaceful]

Powerful and fantastic. You words flow beautifully. A grand read!

[Paul Bell]

Thanks, Pandapeaceful.

[Karmee]

very emotional write here, strong write too in a sense. Very well written

[Paul Bell]

The JD saved the day.

[Corset]

it can be exceeding hard to give up something you find much joy in doing, even though it maybe detrimental to ones own health! Love this. Very inventive and fun to read

[Paul Bell]

I think he gave up in woman.

[Smoking Man]

Well as they say "there's no smoke without fire".
This poem flows beautifully and reflects on a past love.
Yet like a spark to a flame could be revived.
The phoenix is set to rise again from the ashes of love.
Ps make mine a double 😊

[Paul Bell]

Double on the way, Bunny Girl.

[Smoking Man]

Cheers !!!!!!!,bottoms up