First Cut.

She needed the love

Like the stars needed the sky

The trees needed the rain

The passion would come later

Always later

 

She bled, like women do

Sometimes freely

Sometimes not

Just the first cut hurt

It was life

 

She needed the love

Like the fish needed the sea

The sun needed the moon

The passion would come later

Always later

 

She bled, like women do

Small droplets at first

Only blood

Just the first cut hurt

It was life

 

She needed the love

It was life

Just the first cut hurt

The passion would come later

Always later.

Reviews

[...]

First cut can be anything even something sweet and beautiful. Calling for love is always powerful. Enjoyed this one.

[Paul Bell]

If it leads to love, great.
If not. It will definitely lead to pain.

[...]

Yes you can always find right way by trying.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Paul Bell,
"First Cut"
Are we looking? Are we paying attention? Those among us who are not noticed but they know! Love is so big and is meant to be wonderful and safe. It can also be so shattered, so confusing for many .You did a very good job with this writing.
Kids are so vulnerable to how they are treated, or not treated. Home can be a place of nurture or a place of silence, neglect, abuse and a place to escape.
I don't pretend to know all I wish I could but I do know that your poem really speaks volumes.
Life is in the blood; it is the very issue of life. When things have been out of control, particularly girls will take control by bringing forth their own blood and in doing so slice into their own life.
Your poem was beautiful in its truth and in its message. We must be on the alert for those vulnerable ones among us and try to intervene to their betterment, to their protection from harm.
Bless you much.
Kathy

[Paul Bell]

Sorry i didn't get back to you Kathy.
Yeah, it's the ultimate minefield.
It must be the roughest reality in any young life.

[wesecret12]

Beautiful, I felt every word

[Paul Bell]

Thanks wesecret12.

[Valentine]

And many do with no passion felt at all. Valentine

[Paul Bell]

Afraid so.

[LovePoetry0004]

The words match perfectly and I liked all the comparisons. Some how, for such a simple story, I was really astonished a felt like the words meant something really deep.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks, lovePoetry

[TenderWritings]

I love the blend of words and the way this poem takes one within itself! Amazing!

[wordman]

reads like a song,a top ten

[Paul Bell]

Quite like the relaxed way of this place.

[Bacchus]

definitely enters the question of choice...
when this is expressed we empathize with the cutter-
which is what we need to do
hardest choice in the world for the stars to leave the sky...
but miracles can happen.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks Bacchus. Love can be brutal.

[Lizzie Madloch]

i absolutely loved the repetition in this piece.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks Lizzie.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sometimes, people think the two are mutually exclusive. And that is the problem, sometimes, people think.

[Paul Bell]

You're right.