Ouija Vu

I hit the ground running
Feet flat on the clouds
As fast as Mercury
With broken wings
Light as an elephant
Heavy as a feather
Where's the ouija board
Deja vu
Deja vu
Day- light view
Not needed whispered
Purple dragonfly dressed in rags
Not needed butterfly
Dressed in silk hummed
Cloud-light shining brightly in my eyes
Blinding me
Seeing eye dog ahead
On a one-dollar bill
Follow me he said
A message I have
Ouija board ?
Deja vu
You swallowed the ouija board
Message inside you said
The viole(n)t-eyed cat with two tails
Soft as quills
Mercurious  sent me
Skimming the earth
Message inside
For better
Or worse
First or last
Now or later
Forever
Until the next
Deja vu
Deja vu
Orange light flashes
Shivering neon
Message must wait
Today's not the day

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

all of the paradoxes work so well here, it is not the right day for the ouija board...

had one, used it often...its name was jim...it told me things...

right day or wrong day, i didn't ask it enough questions...took partial information, should have known more.

i agree with Lydia...the short compressed lines work well..not just urgency but a kind of rhythm that beats as a reminder.

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Thank you Jacob I had a Ouija board long ago I didn't name it he didn't tell me much it was mostly for fun that my mom bought it for me at that time it was any stigma or fear of them things of changed since then you enjoyed this I don't know where came from it popped into my head so I typed it thank you so much

[Lydia Blackwell]

one of your best. good to read you again. the short clipped lines create a sense of urgency and a fleeting passion that is very effective. Well done!!

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Hello Lydia is so good to see you thank you so much for your very generous and kind review of this one I have no clue where it came from other then you came into my mind after I have watched a movie called sucker Punch sometime back again thank you very much good to see youi

[Abdul Aziz]

This is a breathless piece of literary showing off, almost. And there's nothing wrong in that :D I loved the fast paced rhythm and the oxymorons scattered liberally throughout the poem. Very refreshing!

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Thank you! Just turning things backward-thank you very much :)

[Abdul Aziz]

My pleasure :)

[Angi]

What a fantastic trip this was! I love the viole(n)t-eyed cat. I could see those tails swishing. I love the title and the mystical/magical chant to this. Angi~

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Angi, thank you so much for your kind review, makes me happy to know you liked my mind bending words, Peace and love to you

[BreannaAutumn]

I loved your lines "light as an elephant, heavy as a feather", not something you would expect:) I love your descriptive writing in this piece. thanks for sharing:)

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

thanks so much i am glad you liked it a movie inspired it , 'Sucker Punch'..thanks

[Magdelena]

As always you bring forth magic and as always I get lost inside each magnificent piece.. Once again you have taken my senses and twirled them along the ride within your wonderfully penned imagery..

Bravo!

Much love
~Mags~

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Thanks Mags and it is so good to see you on my page :) Happy you are still here at the cafe.

[Rocans]

Expertly penned. I enjoyed every second of the journey. I particularly liked the line "as fast as Mercury" its short but it has multiple interpretations both mythological and celestial. Good write

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Thanks so much for your time and review :)

[Rocans]

My pleasure

[Greg Skura]

Wow what a liquid ride, that was a lot of fun! I think I will do it again!

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

Sorry for the delayed thank you :) Thanks.

[Z. Shepherd]

Such provocative imagery.

[TL Boehm]

this is beautifully penned. Miss you.

[Chloe..Across the Universe]

thank you very much TL. I missed you also :)