Crucible

Reading through old writings saw this and it is the reviews you should read. Many great ones and so many old friends no longer writing here. it was in defense of a review a friend got

So, you've come here to crucify me with your words for my words , thoughts, feelings that I write here with all the heart and soul inside me. Words that say, use me, write me, please, me.
Thoughts that say tell me, let them see me. Feelings that say release me, set me free.

You say my meter is off, put a disconnect notice on it.You say there is no rhythm, YOU have no rhythm..  perhaps it flows backward like the old timers said the mighty Mississip' flowed after the great earthquake on the New Madrid Fault.

You say there is no rhythm. So maybe I don't dance that well or to the same tune as you do besides that, I'm white.Know fact, we have little rhythm...

Oh, and the structure, bad. built this with my own two hands and I don't really want to tear it down for you. Thank you very much.

 So go ahead, crucify me. Place me on papyrus with pens of quill. I will tear myself down, pour my thoughts, words, feelings on this bloody papyrus.

MY Words, MY Thoughts , My Feelings, and perhaps if they should be deemed worthy of being featured by whoever it is that deems such, I will say Bravo for me , and to you I will say,"Thank you for the review, thanks very much, but I think I will write it, do it my way."

All grammatical and misspelled words you see are welcomed.




I came here because I was invited .. to write, read, share and learn.
The Cafe is kind, the people are kind. The review I read a few days ago WAS not kind.. it seemed as if the person reviewing was deliberately trying to make the writer feel bad.
I am not a writer, I have already stated that. Many I read are writers , writers I would aspire to be like. Some of the writers on this site are young, just getting their feet wet. Still they want to write and have something to say. The writing is a form of release and much better than drugs or alcohol or anything in that vein. I have see some reviews of theirs..cruel reviews. I would imagine many of the younger writers give up when all they needed, need is a bit of encouragement and a few tips, maybe by email as younger people are more sensitive usually.
 And the thing that helps most is reading the fine poetry and stories by the many talented writers here at the Cafe.

Peace and Love

Chloe
 

Author's Note

i think i said it all above in the rambling speech ...

Reviews

[Crystal L. Test]

Bravo, Chloe! I read a very harsh review the other day (not my own) also. I was so annoyed because it was personally attacking the writer and not really the work, itself. I went and read the "critics" work and I had to say that I was unimpressed. I don't know who he thought he was. I've only had one non-constructive review and it's prompted me to write something as well. It's been bouncing around in my head.

By the way, favorite lines:

You say my meter is off, put a disconnect notice on it.

Hilarious since I happen to work for the local electric & gas company! That made my night. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Lionel Braud]

So go ahead, crucify me. Place me on papyrus with pens of quill. I wil tear myself down, pour my thoughts, words, feelings on this bloody papyrus.

this line was very intriguing and witty.

[Floating on the feather..]

The very idea of coming up with this is great....
And the write-up is absolutely impactful.... it will surely serve the purpose

Great work !!

Cheers !

[Crap!]

Great poem.

[~Sorcha~]

i agree with you mostly. And I believe that sometimes my own words seem harsh... but to me thats not always how I portray it. Criticism, that seems to be one of the many things I have suffered like any other person. I am white, so I am racist; I am blonde, so I am dumb; I am a teenager, so I am unwise and 'sensitive'; I am a girl, so I am not as strong as a man; I am not thin by far, so I am not beautiful. I write from my heart even though I know my writing ability is small and will never gain much in this world, surely it will not gain me what some wish for; I write because I have nothing else. True, I love to sing, I love to draw; but when I write, the freedom I feel, it is not comparable to any other. I criticize others and I do not mean ill will or harm to them, I mean to only portray my views and how I see things so as in hoping that they will learn to see my view alongside their own. I do not mean to change their view or make anyone feel inferior, and if ever I do, I am deeply sorry. I know what it is like to be talked down to, and to be told I am not good enough. Some criticism gives that feeling, and if ever my words should, forever should I regret it. I hate for anyone to feel the pains of being inferior; of being a nobody to all others. If my words have hurt you, I beg your forgiveness. I never meant to do anything mean. I just.... I just was happy someone welcomed me to the site and commented to me and reviewed some of my work in a way that didn't make me feel stupid or ignorant. I have been named so many cruel things just for my appearance, and if ever my criticism of your wonderful writing has insulted you, I truly do apologize.

I am sorry, for any wrongs I have cause you, I am truly sorry.

[Crap!]

I feel a creative rift forming in the current.

[J]

Yes, Chloe, I agree with what you write; after all, it's creativity that counts first and foremost, and who can truly cuff that?

I think I know the reviewer you were speaking of, the little insecure prick. But... you know that I critique as well Chloe, but in a hopefully encouraging and positive way? I'd hate to think that I've ever limited anyone's creative freedom... I really do. I guess I'm never sure if I can offer a suggestion with a lot of people... if any of my suggestions ever piss you off, feel free to tell me... I can take it lol.

And, you know, like everyone else has pretty much said, f**k them if what they write is of no use, and all they can say are derogatory remarks. I know there's a difference between that and a spirit only wanting to help. I think you know that too.

J

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Yee F*****g haa ,
I does love someone that has the nuts to put exactly what lyes on their tongue ,straight onto paper (or cyberlike s**t) ,excuse the language ,haahahahahaha (sorry Chloe I cant stop laffin ,you are so refreshing).........I really do think I love you ,F**K, I cannot stop laffin ,thankyou ....
I ,like NEARLY everyone below Loved that bit o Brilliance ,you really do underestimate your writing abilities...Today someone in Australia ,the other side of the World ,has read what you wrote and enjoyed it over and over agaian..You have insight my darling ,something some lack..
Eye ,woops ,I mean ,I ,agree totally with your views on words like "F**K' and stuff ,(still laffin) and think maybe there is a new language on the street ,one sadly some dont unnerstand ,but F**K ,its there its in your face an it aint goin nowhere ,such is the beauty of language ,EVER EVOLVING.....
I think ive drifted Chloe ,sorry ,
This is one Great peice of "work" ,it rocks with the truth ,I couldnt help but notice out of 9 reviews an after bein posted only yesterday ,it is already filing the libraries of the CAFE ,well done..
Glory be to the Queen of the Truth ,that was wunnerful....
Still laffin ,great work....

[Valentine]

Chloe, I think all writers hear at one time or another reviews that they hate and doesnt't please them.. on this site I find there are really not many reviewers. Most just say good job and let it go..Personally, if I make a mistake as I am a rotten typist I want to have it pointed out. Also, if every person wrote exactly the same we all could read one book or poem and be done with reading for the rest of our lives..I know nothing about Haiku but I am slowly learning what it is. If you ever send in a writiung to a publisher and even if they accept it..be prepared for a bashing as their editors correct and change and send galley sheets to read and make changes until it can drive you crazy.. Be an individual if that is what you want, but let the reviewer be an original also. None of us think every piece we write is great..I know my family after my divorce asked me not to write such morbid and black poems..I didn't even realize I was..I was just venting like you did here..I am glad you got daid what you feel and now can let it go and not take it so seriously. Or go to one of theirs and spam it...valentien

[T. L. O'Neal]

I hear you Chloe. There's nothing wrong with a critique, but you don't have to be nasty about it. Everything does have some redeeming qualities to it, and they need to be praised also. There is no need to dash a youngster's spirit just for the reviewer's sport. A fine write and one that needed doing. T

[Cameron Connolly]

YES!!!! thank goodness you wrote this. i remember seeing some of those reviews and really thinking how sad it was that someone would be so hypercritical of someone else's work when they truly have no right to be becuase im sure that theirs isnt as good. thank you so much for writing this i was so happy to see it.

Cameron