KissA Poem by Chloe..Across the Universekisses can change many things...My heart quickens when your lips touch mine
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just soul kisses
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Usually repetitions in small poems stick out to me, here it works well. The repeated words and rhymes trickle down throughout the poem in such a wonderful simple way. It's very much like the kiss you describe. You send shivers down the poem as well.
"My heart quickens when your lips touch mine a feeling so divine, so wondrous, bewitching" Good job. Posted 17 Years Ago9 of 9 people found this review constructive. |
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I think you have the perfect kiss captured well and truly!
Posted 17 Years Ago4 of 4 people found this review constructive. |
i thought it was a wonderful piece...showed the effects a kiss can have on someone
"How can I be in the darkest place of my soul then with just the touch of your lips be blinded by light? " absolutely loved these lines... Posted 17 Years Ago4 of 4 people found this review constructive. |
this read like a song. with a very distinctive beat. love the meter. i guess it's common though to hear music when experiencing a really great kiss!
Posted 17 Years Ago4 of 4 people found this review constructive. |
This just proves that one good kiss can change your perspective. I honestly think that a kiss can be more intimate than sex itself. You can't hide yourself when you give a kiss. You give of yourself. Your emotions come shining thru whether you want them to or not. A good kiss has to have the right chemistry to move forward to sex or even a relationship. If the kiss ain't good...nothing else will be either. I truly believe that. LOL Thanks for sharing.
Posted 17 Years Ago4 of 4 people found this review constructive. |
I love the simplicity of this...
so many emotions contained in the few words sprinkled here and there for max effect... nice job. Posted 17 Years Ago5 of 5 people found this review constructive. |
had to read this one again :) it's just soo nice!
Posted 17 Years Ago6 of 6 people found this review constructive. |
Wonderful , your poems are awesome. I like the way you write all together.
Posted 17 Years Ago6 of 6 people found this review constructive. |
Beautiful. So cute and witty, showing the true affections a simple kiss can hold. I really enjoyed this and it was great to see that a kiss is not just a kiss, it matters who it comes from. A quick beat, but a heartfelt message. Thanks.
Posted 17 Years Ago6 of 6 people found this review constructive. |
i love to read this one over and over...i'm nnot the one getting or giving the kiss, but i hope the receiver of my lips feels as you do!!
Posted 17 Years Ago5 of 6 people found this review constructive. |
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Added on April 10, 2008
40 Reviews
Added on April 10, 2008
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Chloe..Across the Universe
Smalltown, USA, AR
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Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..Writing
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