I Walk Alone (Winter's Walk)

peaceful winter walking

Frosty 'morn
dawn's violet hues
bundled in wool
fleece covered feet
crunch frozen earth
I walk
solitude
repose
tranquility
serenity
peace
breathe

Author's Note

i wrote this a few months after joining this site.. someone told me poetry need not have a lot of words
this was my first attempt to cut back on a flowing mind.. this was when this site was in its golden days.

Reviews

Of what you've written thus far, this is one of my favorites. It feels natural - like there's a moment's passion in it . . .(almost like William Carlos Williams' Red Wheelbarrow:so much dependsupona red wheelbarrowglazed with rainwaterbeside the whitechickens.My only suggestion is that you reconsider the last six words . . . I like the word "repose" but the words tranquility, serenity, and peace came across to me as kinda' repeatitive and don't seem to add any additional insight per line as another descriptive word might do (I would offer suggestions, but . . . ) . . . Does that make sense? I have already been out this morning, had the cold dew on my bare feet (chasing my puppy); I can tell that the sun's quickly heating up a sheer blue sky . . . I'm so glad that the ground is no longer frozen in the mornings, but then your little poem made me miss it a little . . . ;) Thanks for sharing.

[Blackbirdsong]

This is a very succinct and beautiful poem. I live in snow country, almost 200" of snow here every winter and the imagery you use is perfect and sublime.

I did one little thing though. Bundled is misspelled.

I look forward to reading more of your work.

Blackbirdsong

[Binary Canary]

Very pure. I like it a lot.

[Stephen]

lovely in everyway. A soft meditation on beauty.

[Kristina Moulaison]

This is lovely! A breath of fresh air.

[Martin R Roa]

Nice. My niece is named Violet, and that's the second poem I've read today with that color in it. Nice little poem. Alone doesn't always mean lonely, does it? And breathing helps me attain that peace sometimes.

[Lionel Braud]

I walk
solitude
repose
tranquility
serenity
peace
breathe

the following words accentuates the walk taken, followed by each footstep.
great setup in the first part as well.

[Miranda]

cool poem. it reminds me of my walk with anna. she used to be my best friend. maybe she hates me cos i snogged he brother(john) oh well. very cool. m

[Crap!]

This was short and sweet, I liked the line "cruch frozen earth" as it was something I thing all can relate to that weren't born in the tropics. A great read.

[Carrissa Cone]

So short, yet so god damn strong...
beautiful, beautiful.
Ck

[Gandré]

sweet sweet!
I love this moment, can even smell the cold morning.
loved it.