Cloud

nothing but words

  I

Fell
            Like

                     An

                             Alien

   Into  this

               World



Different
Strange
Out of place

           
                This

                             Is
                                    Me



After being taken in-
Nurtured
By Clouds
I fell from the sky

                                            This
                                                          
                                                         Is
 
                                                                   Why


My eyes water
heart beats
F a S t E r 


                                                      I

                                                                 Am

                                                                           A

                                                                                    Cloud

           



        I rain                                                                                     most daze

Author's Note

I feel weird! inspired, if you can call it that, by panic attacks and heartache
dreams, and other things

Reviews

[Jibey]

The image of the cloud captures the feeling of insubstantiality (sorry about that word!) ... The pattern is used with skill to create a visual effect of the cloud floating down and the tears that flow... One sense the fractured emotion in the writing -
My eyes water
heart beats
F a S t E r

Interesting and moving

[ice]

Written in beautiful visuals, in words of high, emotional content..
A fine example of concrete poetry.
"weird", can be a good mood, sometimes, attest...this poem.
Love it...... ;-)

[emmajoy]

Beautifully laid out, beautifully said .. and the ending says it all .. precious words.

[.]

this is lighthearted but there is definitely an undercurrent of pain in this..panic attacks are not funny ..I sympathise..nicely expressed though ..ending especially good..

[Rossen]

I felt you falling form the heavens today
raining down my ears You made such a beautiful sound
Chloe it's all I wanted to hear

brilliant writing

[Ruth]

A re visit lol
I love this piece!
xx

[alesuriko]

Interesting. I like the structure, it really adds to the flow and rhythm of the poem. The poem really makes you feel like a cloud, not quite consistent and physical. Drifting and vacant, temporary but still existing... kind of like life.

[blood red skies]

I like the way you wrote this. creative and interesting.
really good poem. i enjoyed it.

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

This has the appearance of being a very 'light' write. Understanding, to a large degree, what sparks a write like this....well, I am going to just sit next to you on that cloud. I brought marshmallows. Lets peg people with them. :D

xo

[Ruth]

Excellent hon!
This is impressively strctured, the falling apparent:)
The end line a blast!
Wow!
I love this!

xx

[Desert Dreamer]

As if you are the daughter of the Thunderbeings, a mythic creature. Of course you would be out of place among most of the humans who walk the earth, but not all. I like your poem and can feel your inspiration.