Cloud

nothing but words

  I

Fell
            Like

                     An

                             Alien

   Into  this

               World



Different
Strange
Out of place

           
                This

                             Is
                                    Me



After being taken in-
Nurtured
By Clouds
I fell from the sky

                                            This
                                                          
                                                         Is
 
                                                                   Why


My eyes water
heart beats
F a S t E r 


                                                      I

                                                                 Am

                                                                           A

                                                                                    Cloud

           



        I rain                                                                                     most daze

Author's Note

I feel weird! inspired, if you can call it that, by panic attacks and heartache
dreams, and other things

Reviews

[Jibey]

The image of the cloud captures the feeling of insubstantiality (sorry about that word!) ... The pattern is used with skill to create a visual effect of the cloud floating down and the tears that flow... One sense the fractured emotion in the writing -
My eyes water
heart beats
F a S t E r

Interesting and moving

[Nothing Personal]

that's a heart raving loneliness..which speaks as a voice in this poem..a voice which seeks solace from something distant and away from Earth. Well written poem, interesting construct here..

[Robin]

the layout gives it the airy feel of a cloud filled sky , the words drizzle emotion ..

[An owl on the moon]

You've created quite and ambience through your form and flow, and your words are filled with an emotional angst. This is such a brilliant self expression, and I can relate to the feel of falling...

[The Analog Kid]

I have not seen this gem before, Chloe. The visuals you used are so cool. Such a surreal existence in the clouds. It's like a defense mechanism to stay up high in the "lofty" clouds, where it is ok to "rain" most of the time...

[Sam Severn]

I adore the way this makes me think of David Bowie, n' THE MAN WHO FELL TO EARTH (one of my FAVE MOVIES!), n' the way this flows down the page is GORGEOUS!!!!!
㋡

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

You have managed to produce these words in the most beautiful way chloe! They fall, like rain from the sky, pitta patter, down they come, just as I imagine, the inspiration came to you.

Beautiful drenching inspiration from beautiful you. I really like, especially the way it ends...most daze

In fine poetic deed.

Smiling at you

Tai

[Quinn Blackburn]

Love the drifting feel of this one... capable of serenely floating by or whipping up into a gale, as needed. It's fun to play with form too. The only suggestion I could make is pulling the "I rain" and "most daze" a little closer together as the "I rain" is easily overlooked.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Sounds like you need some Xanax for those panic attacks...talk to your doctor. He should be able to help you out.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

This is magnificent! You are so creative!