A Message

Though I wrote this for something different it is dedicated to all who lost lives , loved ones, homes, clothes, shoes EVERYTHING in the outbreak of recent weather in the South -Bless you all

Green Eyes
A Message
A Spell A Rebel Yell
A Whisper-

Brothers and Sisters
Don't Panic
Everything's Not Lost-

God Put A Smile Upon Your Face


Violet Hill
White Shadow
Strawberry Swing
Cemeteries of London-

We Never Change
Death Will Never Conquer-

Author's Note

All song titles of/by a great band, Coldplay- none of the words are mine just placed song titles in a way to make a bit of sense for a contest.
Also for a special person with green eyes who is in Heaven..
Miss you...

The one line .. "God put a smile upon your face leave in or take out?
Today I say leave that line in for sure.

Reviews

[Mason]

Yeah, I don't listen to Coldplay so, at first, I was like "Huuuh? o.O," but now I see.
I think it's really cool how you worked the song titles into this unique sonnet.
Leave it in. If you put it there, there's a reason, so keep it.
This special person...A sibling perhaps? a child? (the swing)
The ending "Death Will Never Conquer" sends a nice message of hope. I liked it. I will be shocked if this doesn't win first prize!

[Desert Dreamer]

Leave the line "God put a smile upon your face". I like your poem and the poem idea, too. I love music and I this is a great message.

[James Watts]

I would leave it. The line seems to fit and gives the poem that extra human touch. That's my opinion , anyway. Nice write.

[A.Lee]

I really like this. And I like Coldplay. I think you should leave that line. It fits there in its own way. Nice work.

[Devons]

I thought I vaguely didn't recognise any of these titles!! I HATE Coldplay!

Except 'Slither' - after that it was all down hill...

However. this poem of titles does work and has a punchiness to it that demands the eye; and it has a dark, edgy quality..

..which, I'm afraid to say, Coldplay do not possess...!

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

Oh Chloe, how you did rise to the challenge! This is a beautiful tribute, and within the confines of the rules. Excellent. My opinion? Leave the line. It is wonderful!

~True

[Emily B]

this is wonderful, so good to see you inspired again :)

[Alex Thomas]

The rhythm was slightly off on some lines. Other than that a very clear message. "Death will never conquer" is such a powerful line. The cold play reference is awesome too.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is pure music. I like the ending. Death will never conquer. We must hold on to the memories of people missed in a life. Total poem was very good. A excellent poem.
Coyote