Heart Song

 

 

 

The fire warms her

bones

body

she begins to thaw
 

Life hard

winter brutal

she can only sit

wait for her husband
 

Left early morn'
a day ago

to hunt game

they were

withering to bone
 

Snow flies like pollen

in Spring
the wind howls
like a Banshee

Her heart feels so heavy

fears unabashed

he could be lost

gone forever
fears come fast

Gazing into the flames

her mind

D
  R 
    I
      F
        T
          S

like the falling snow

When she first saw him

her heart sang a song

for no other

did she long

Worry wrinkes brow

fear overcomes

to swallow

so hard

Ears hearing noise
head quickly turns

an animal
or
her love?
 

Apprehension fills

she walks to the door

breath of releif
unsaid prayer

He stands there

this man she adores

"Were you worried"?,

asks he

gathering her into his arms

"Only a little",

spoken through dampened eyes
 

'Never doubt love, always will

I return to you

with you I could not survive"

Getting out her skillet

to cook what he has brought

her heart begins to sing

it's song again
 

With him she could survive
longer than without
food

His
love
fills
her

Author's Note

this was written for a picture prompt contest before the great delete.. i cannot find the picture.. so i just posted the poem.. not sure i ever did put it up.

Reviews

[Desert Dreamer]

I like the singing heart image I see in my mind...I am glad you don't have the picture because I have created a beautiful one all on my own. Very emotional words,
"When she first saw him
her heart sang a song
for no other
did she long"
I like the format with the word "drifts" spread out so the mind of the reader drifts a little as well. I like your poem and am glad you have posted it.

[AK]

Sounds just like a winter in my Alaska. Nicely done indeed!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I love it, it's like a story unfolding in a picture in a poem. Very nice!

[Devons]

I can imagine the picture that once parented this poem, for it is clearly painted in the story it tells. It is a heart-warming, philosophical tale, examining the simplicity of love that many people often overlook. It reads like a kind of fairy-tale parable. Indeed, the scene that it describes reminds one of the sort of tales a child would be told during fire-side nights whilst a storm rages outside. A charming, reassuring, and somewhat sagacious piece of poetic story-telling.

[Jessie Sianodel]

I'm glad the guy came back : )
It reminds me of my poem perhaps, although the guy didn't come back in that one.....at least I don't think he did....he may have later on after the poem ended.

Isn't it strange how I talk about my poems and writings as if they were true, or real?

Wonderful poem Chloe!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

here you stop the world and catch the reader on a heartbeat in time~ the emotions of her evoked so sharply it's truly as if you were breathing through her~you certainly do draw a a vivid world of her with such a fine composition~

[Michael X]

this reminds me of native american folklore, i loved the emotional play you give the setting. and it fells like winter and snowy, yet warm inside waiting for love to return. the form is awsome. i loved this, great job chloe

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

this is funny.. either people hated this or could think anything to say .. i just noticed the views as opposed to the reviews !

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I love this---wonderful imagery-
mixed in a narrative great format:-)
i like the worried sort of mood through out:-)
This is a great poem!!!

james:-)

[Andy]

I like this, not only for the deep love that your words show they have for each other, but for the reminder of how fear and worry does such a good job of helping our minds to predict the future 'he could be lost gone forever'.
Well done.
Andy