Surfacing

I swim just below the surface
Not too far down
Just far enough
No one notices
I hide here coming up for air
When
Whenever
My lungs feel full and bursting
The tide
Comes and sweeps me away
From the world
In which
I feel
Alien

Once I walked upon Earth in Sunlight
It shone around me like a halo
bright and brilliant
Golden
I could breathe free
I could feel, touch, smell
The world was azure
Lavender tinted

I fell down into an
Abyss
I was struck by
Darkness
The Darkness envelpoed me in its cloak of electric
Black velvet

I longed for the darkness and the embrace
As I waited beneath a
Blood red
Moon
I could again touch, smell, feel,
the Darkness bruised my face

Darkness
When did I fall under your spell that I could not dispel

As the Darkness faded
The Water invited me soft and salty
Like a Teardrop
I swim here
Just under the surface
I need to
I should come up for
Air
The Water is withering ,
withering me away
away

Away like a little boys lost kite
Flown into the Sky
Not gone , perhaps,
Perhaps lost in transition

I think the sky is falling
There is no place to hide
Unless the Water can protect me from its blow
Maybe it can
Maybe it can do this

Go back to sleep
Swimming so deep
Against the
Tide
Which is no
No Prince at all
Yet it still takes my breath away

Reviews

[Phibby Venable]

it is heartbreaking to have to stay inside the dark, inside yourself
when the whole world might be yours if you could find a map
unmarked with fear. love the water here and the tide being no
prince at all. very beautiful.

[ice]

The water metaphor could very well be compared to the dark..swimming could be sleeping..The water, perhaps a dream..But I believe that this poem is about turning inward away from reality, which is sometimes just too much to bear..
and at the end..
"Swimming so deep
Against the
Tide
Which is no
No Prince at all
Yet it still takes my breath away "
But hiding beneath the surface is still not a place of security,
"No Prince at all"
Yet she still goes there.
An interesting poem, that could have many different interpretaions..

[Rossen]

Reading this gives me pause calm silent pause...

[The Analog Kid]

I never read this one, Chloe. This is one of my favorite poems that you have written. There is not a lot of interpretation needed; this is straightforward. You conjure up such striking images. When you can capture these feelings, this is really the essence of being a poet, to me!!!

[Smitten Drive]

I find this poem very well written, along with plenty of emotion and heart in it as well. Very well done Chloe.

[Wednesday]

Beautiful. Simply beautiful...

[deeps]

i like this, this is very well written

[Desert Dreamer]

I feel the darkness coming, and the need to hide. Amazing descriptions of being protected by the water, but yet "the water is withering me away". I have been to this place you describe, I get goose bumps remembering...This is a powerful poem. You have written it in such a way that the reader can relate it to their own life.

[Barry S. Maltese]

To find refuge is sometimes so difficult, and your discription of your escape from darkness - however uncertain - is done so well. Once again, I enjoyed your creativity at work. Good job!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When we hide behind those comforts of life they can start to feel like a weight holding us down... your writing never ceases to amaze me.