Surfacing

I swim just below the surface
Not too far down
Just far enough
No one notices
I hide here coming up for air
When
Whenever
My lungs feel full and bursting
The tide
Comes and sweeps me away
From the world
In which
I feel
Alien

Once I walked upon Earth in Sunlight
It shone around me like a halo
bright and brilliant
Golden
I could breathe free
I could feel, touch, smell
The world was azure
Lavender tinted

I fell down into an
Abyss
I was struck by
Darkness
The Darkness envelpoed me in its cloak of electric
Black velvet

I longed for the darkness and the embrace
As I waited beneath a
Blood red
Moon
I could again touch, smell, feel,
the Darkness bruised my face

Darkness
When did I fall under your spell that I could not dispel

As the Darkness faded
The Water invited me soft and salty
Like a Teardrop
I swim here
Just under the surface
I need to
I should come up for
Air
The Water is withering ,
withering me away
away

Away like a little boys lost kite
Flown into the Sky
Not gone , perhaps,
Perhaps lost in transition

I think the sky is falling
There is no place to hide
Unless the Water can protect me from its blow
Maybe it can
Maybe it can do this

Go back to sleep
Swimming so deep
Against the
Tide
Which is no
No Prince at all
Yet it still takes my breath away

Reviews

[.]

you seem so free in this dream but at the same time afraid of something..there are plenty of metaphors and you weave them together masterfully..

[JRB]

Underwater or above when sadness invades the soul both feel like a drowning.
Floating in a sea of confusion, seeking the life vest of desires not meant, under the influence of ignorance. Nice write, glad to see you back as well, I too was gone for a while……

[Greg the Bard]

I have read your work from the first day you posted here on the Cafee. I feel like we are brother and sister.The depth at which you write is a level I will never reach. Your images are those of the raw emotions themselves. You were gone for a while and have just gotten back and this work sort of measures that time gone. I hope you never leave again. "The Bard"

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I have been underwater .. just beginning to surface.

[Robin]

a poetic swim in the dark waters of emotion , you leave us breathless ~

[emmajoy]

This is a dark, powerful, lost, beautiful piece of writing; its a battle of self living life versus self in life; swimming the wrong way, not being able to see ahead, the dread of going deeper into darkness, and yes, flying away like the little boy's lost kite .. without control, without light.

I'll come back to this, it's so complex. As to the form and meter and all that technical stuff, it doesn't matter, the emotions are at the helm.

[pheasant]

Excellent imagery and wording keeps a mystical feel fluidly running to the end.
High marks...
As meadow larks
Cry out
About
This
Half-bliss

[An owl on the moon]

There is a shadow that hangs over this richly painted piece... How a life can slip just below the surface... stay hidden and quiet... I was reminded of a younger me... near drowned under that water. Your words evoke that delicate place of living that hangs in the balance.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Very vivid, sad, longing. And I know how it is out there. Lovely, sweet friend.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This is so well written! Love the imagery you used in this poem! Trying to free yourself from the darkness, but fear to surface from it keeps you under the water!