Frozen

cold and locked away

On this merry-go-round we call life
we share a horrible secret

How can I melt those frozen tears you shed
making your face a mask

You say, " There is no beauty"
you have a hole in your heart

No warmth can save you
from the disease you carry

Like a pocket-watch your grandfather gave you
dead and buried in the frozen earth

You have a hole in your heart
as deep as the Artic
as cold as the tundra

Frozen

Author's Note

No time to write .. or i should say no quiet ... so another dusty poem from the crypt..
Someday maybe ..

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Interesting imagery. I kind of feel cold already... which is a nice feeling considering the 101 degree heat where I'm living. :P

I personally think this is a very deep poem. Unfortunately, I can't really dig far below ground to tell you what it tells me, but I will say that you're really gifted with these images and figurative language you present us with. The vision you give me is a winter wasteland that is beautiful but terrible to dwell in... it's a stange sight, but I have to admit that I'm impressed with the result.

This is an excellent and highly descriptive poem with possibly one simple theme or many complex message. Great job and thanks for posting.

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Chidoriflower]

This is intense and beautiful, I can't help reading it more than once...

[kublakhan27]

A pretty powerful piece...strong images^^

[Muse]

Its these kind of poems that get lost and burried...that often possess so much soul. I'm so glad you decided to share this. Well done.

[Λsylum Ƣo&#..]

Chloe~ very succinct and to the point; that with great metaphors makes for one exceptional penning. I especially like,

"No warmth can save you
from the disease you carry

Like a pocket-watch your grandfather gave you
dead and buried in the frozen earth"

xx

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I can't believe I never reviewed this one... love can melt the coldest of hearts but filling the hole is another story... such a sad poem but expressed wonderfully.

[Poetic Beauty]

Sometimes we feel like that and love warms the heart again over time love the strong frozen imagery of this piece.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

From your palette of words you chose to create these verses. Your voice speaks loud and clear of a heart made of ice. How sweet you are to see through why this heart is frozen.lovely poem Chloe

[Sean Allen]

Good job, with the proper machines hooked up, science could prove that your words have created a drop in temperature as one reads these well crafted words. I thought I had written a dark poem called the merry go round once, but I don't think so. Either way, yours would be better.

[Dutch Jr.]

First off, let me just say this poem is extremely well orchestrated poetically, with very vivid lines and great imagery, to all the sense. I love these poems; I like to think, analyze, and take stabs.

Let's see.... making face a mask... there is no beauty.... buried frozen......

I don't know why, but I get the idea of a person with low self-esteem. The main piece of evidence I use to come to this conclusion was the stanza:

"You say, 'There is no beauty'
you have a hole in your heart"


Like self-esteem has gone cold, the person is "cold and locked away", and you charaterize it as a disease, which is not only very creative ad just like you poets, but goes along with the idea of low self-esteem. I think it's significant that you used the winter also, because it is a time of the year that only has beauty to some. Again, ties in with my theory. A person with low self-esteem sometims isn't an ugly peson, in reality they are quite beautiful people, may it be physically or intellectually. I'm probably completely wrong, in which case I'll be back... to do more digging.

PS: If I'm wrong, don't tell me the answer. I'm a determined individual.. lol

[ettorney]

ouch. Dark poem but well written. You have a nice fluid style that draws the reader in, begging to find deeper and deeper meaning in each line. No wasted words here.

nice write (even with the dust).