Chasing

I was chasing you
like a long lost dream
so silly of me
as if i should chase you

I was keeping up
until the polka-dots blew off
my dress
I stopped to gather them
fell behind

I was on your heels
like the hounds of hell
like a woman gone mad
chasing you

so silly of me to chase you
as if i should chase you

I almost caught you
rain came and drained me dry
i fell behind
just a bit behind

so silly of me to chase you
as if i should chase you
you’re always one step behind

Author's Note

i just decided to see what came out as i set here.. this was/is it
strange and befuddled..

The picture is of our snow we finally got two weeks ago ! :)
So pretty

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

Oh my gosh....I absolutely LOVE this piece! I picked out this as a favorite part:
I was keeping up
unitl the polka-dots blew off
my dress
I stopped to gather them
fell behind
It's so genius....I can actually see you stopping to pick up all your polka dots...how fun and original. The ending also blew me away....a brilliant twist. The whole piece is just fabulous, if you ask me. Good write!!

[Vatsayayana]

Scrumptious darling!
This was so empowering and uplifting.
Just what I needed at the moment.
I love your imagery, you throw the oddest things in sometimes.
The polka dots in this case. It's sharp and fun and witty.
I don't know what'll come about next.
But this was too good. Loved it.

[A.r. Bazian]

i like the imagery and the prey/predator chase thingy!
maybe its something you're actually chasing? a figure from your recent/far past even!
anyway!
i like the poem!

keep it up!

[Silent Pacer]

Nice twist at the end. it was a very powerful message, and you used grand imagery. I truly love the ending. it flowed so smoothly. very very nice write.