Your Other Love

just came to me so i got up and jotted it down ..

You kissed me dizzy
said you were going for a walk
i didn't think to follow
the doctor said you were fine
a complete recovery
almost a miracle

And yes, it seemed so
the sunshine was back in your eyes
burning brightly
darkness blotted
gone

Thinking back
perhaps
the brightness shining through
was the madness seeping in
once again
and i didn't notice
so happy was i that you were back

A few hours later a knock on the door
a man in uniform standing there
looking anxious, nervous
my heart fell
i could not swallow

Seems you had walked calmly, quietly
into the Sea
no looking back
no struggles
you succumbed to your other love
Mistress Sea

You had left me
left me alone
hollow and empty
dizzy
but not from your kisses

Sometimes as i set by the shore
where you took your last walk
the sun shining down
my eyes blurred from the brightness
i see you there in the water waving
waving and smiling at me

my heart lightens

Setting there with the moonlight melting
into the Sea
I think i hear you call my name
softly, faintly
oh so sweetly i hear you say my name

my heart sings again

It is only the waves crashing in
my heart dies again
you are gone
swept away willingly into her arms

It's these times i curse her
her beauty,  seduction
she took you from me
so far away

It hurts to breathe
i cannot feel
inside i am as dead as you
half not whole

I die again with each wave that tickles my toes



 

Author's Note

trying to write something new.. so tired of trying to find the right reviews for the few poems i have left... starting over seems easier .. tho i would gladly repost my poem Different .. gone

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

Oh my!! The poems that come to you are fantastic. This is so sad. Is there a story behind it? I love how you carry the message here and the ending so sad but beautifully penned my friend.



Author's Note: I know, I've had the same prob, so sorry Chloe.

[emmajoy]

That final line, those last words say everthing, they're like the start and finish in one beautifully tragic sentence.

There are so many phrases, so many sadnesses beautifully written I don't know which to example. Maybe best not, maybe just said that the tragedy you've displayed with amazing creativity and technical skil is simply .. superb.

[Ladysue]

Oh, wow, this is really good. It is so full of emotion and tugs deeply at the heart strings. Sad, but so beautifully written...

[Art Sun]

Very nice work...the flow of ones mind into a new emotion of writing always brings out some of the best...

nice...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

breathtaking beautiful spinerette~ the melancholy poignant in the languid and sorrowing presentation~ what vivid imagery you create with your tale of love lost to the sea~ mesmerizing gorgeous pearl of a read~

[dreamer :)]

THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST POEMS I HAVE EVER HAD THE GRATITUDE TO READ!!! IT'S LOVELY!

[Larry Dyson]

been there just recently ..considering it now..you Move Me!

[Jibey]

The drama of this was well portrayed and the emotional depth came across in the simplicity of the writing and the uncluttered structure... It worked well..

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

an old poem from my mind three years or so ... xo

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes many of us stand by the great sea and wish for different ending. I was in California for three years and create many friendships with people waiting for no-one. Wine and good beer open door to good conversation and a little laughter if you can get lucky. I like this poem. The ocean can create peace and allow us to re-birth lost faces. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[LonelySoul]

this one brings a tear to my eyes...