Chemicals

 

 

 

The chemicals were there
the smell, feel, taste
they were careful not to uncork the vial
temptation so strong

They were each other's half
they were careful not to slice the middle of the apple
candied and sweet

He came into her life
on a hot July day by circimstance
perhaps in retrospect, serendipity
meant to be
the timing was, it was
off like a clock with a broken
tick-tock

Came he did even though the clock was
off and out of time
to look at each one seperately
they were ordinary

He tall and thin
lanky eyes of ice-blue
though so warm
one of the last cowboys
a dying breed

She tall dark hair with eyes to match
warm and inviting with a slight foreign accent
ordinary by standards

To see them together
now this was another story of it's own
both looked beautiful, mystical and so magical
electricity sparked , flew shooting
arrows with tips of red love into each other's heart

The timing was off
broken like a clock
the love was so apparent
they fit each other like a glove

He asked her to come with him
with a shakey voice and tears falling
she told him all the reasons she could not

Being in tune with each other
these things he understood
with tears falling he pulled her to him
she did not resist

One kiss? The temptation so great
the timing so off
she touched his face
he drove away out of her life
just as he had driven into it

She sank to her knees
he could see her in his rearview
through the hot July haze and
red dust from the dirt road

Never did they forget the other
as a love like this comes but once in a life time
light years apart, still their
love was not lost

Author's Note

inspired by a book amd movie .. i bet you can tell what book..

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Bittersweet beauty in this poem that tells a story, Chloe! No matter how much love there is between two people, sometimes it just doesn't work. There was a song a few years ago entitled "Sometimes love is not enough" and this came to mind as I read your words. No, I don't know where it came from, but I do know I liked it a lot. Lydia

[Andromeda]

this was brilliant

[James K. Blaylock]

This was overwhelmingly sad. Sometimes love just can't stay, even after it happens along. I have no idea as to where this came from, either.

[Gary H]

I'm going to guess a song from the picture you have created but Cinderella also springs to mind, as does Sleeping Beauty. Took me a couple of reads to fit everything together and I think this is a really good piece of work. I guess for me the first two stanzas are the most intriguing as I haven't quite worked them out yet which is good as I wouldn't like you to think your writing is too obvious.

For someone who is determined to tell everyone that they can't write, this is very impressive!

[G. Cedillo]

a natural story teller, yeah i guess its like what the old writing adage says: write what you know about, huh?
"he drove away out of her life
just as he had driven into it" ----> good lines
thanks for sharing this,
g

[Gandré]

This was a beautiful description of perhaps the first love, magical, breathtaking; you understand the sensual fantasy making it into a fabric of a very real romance, so touching, so true.

[desertraven]

Hmm, wonderful piece, just can't put my finger on it. Sounds like a movie. light years apart... At first, I would have guessed maybe, Underworld, but then no. I am stumped.
Great write!
Sandra♥

[Brette Medb]

I wish I knew where it came from but either way this was great, so loving and amazing yet so bittersweet.... True love comes once in a life time but I truly hope that if it's the wrong time for it their paths will never cross again. Great write,


Brette

[Le' Pugh']

I can't... The TV in my cave has really bad reception though, so I could have seen it and not remember.

Felt like I just saw a movie right here, though... great pictures in my head while I read this.
Couldn't help but think of Bogey.

This is a great love story. Great work!

Bear

[TL Boehm]

It reminds me of fairy tales from my child hood, a mix of snow white and sleeping beauty....spun into a modern poem. Well done, eloquent, beautiful writing.

[Phillip J Clayton]

i can't guess wher eit's from but it reminds me of a movie i saw once a western actually...(not a fan of westerns however lol), it also reminds me of my current situation :?.....but it is an awessom poem!