Bewitchment

three words..

                  

What do i do
how do i live
breathe
sleep
eat
lie
talk
dream
scheme
die

Did i
push you away?
was i
too clingy?
when i
said those
three
little
words
"I
love
you"
did i scare you?

Sometimes
i frighten myself
too
on nights
when the
moon
is full
i do have this habit
of saying
I
Love
You

I do think you
bewitched me
 

Author's Note

Some people are a little or a lot intimidated by the words, ' i love you' ..

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

I like this write...often times two people see the same relationship so differently...and when what we perceive as a great relationship ends, we are sometimes left to wonder...why? what went wrong? It's those questions that can haunt us and become our baggage almost more than the heartache of a failed relationship. Always second guessing ourselves in future relationships...losing some of the freedom to just be ourselves.

laura

[Mpotavin]

Take out the "I love you" those three words will be enough. Watch your i/I's you switch cases, and unless your e.e. cummings you just can't use the little i's. Very minimalist, so there is really little to say. Where were you when this happened? What were you doing? I find many new writers tend to only concern themselves with the emotions, and completely neglect using other descriptive elements like setting or initiating some action. It's like you almost show yourself in the 3rd stanza, which is by far the most interesting, but then you step back and drop a finishing line. I would consider making this longer and including more details around the emotional state. I can't say how many poems have started out just like this one, and I doubt you want to be lobbed into a niche.

[poddar kushal]

it is the special way never visited by the us...may be the destination is the same...

[RareRed]

Wow...Im in love with this! It's a great piece and evokes so many different emotions. Funny how those 3 so simple yet so meaningful words can frighten people! It is wonderfully expressed in this poem. Thank you for sharing!

[Dani California]

I think the only reason anyone would be intimidated by love is if they doubted its sincerity, leaving them vulnerable to pain, if they allow it.

This is a beautiful piece. It evokes emotions - memories. Wow. Wonderful job Chloe.

[An owl on the moon]

Simply mesmerizing! Your succinct lines and phrases brilliantly cut at the fear we sometimes hold of loving and letting go.

[Zane Mathias]

I Love it!! And its Layout. Great job

[T.B. Odin]

Chloe, I have no words for you...What do I do? How do I live? Sometimes I frighten myself too...
YOU are clever and astonishing. I love your masterful inspirations and fantastic poems. This is very powerful and drives straight to the heart with a devastating point. Great. Great. Great.

[Ryan]

... that was so related to how she broke up with me. I feel your pain. As long as you are expressing yourself I think you'rer doing great

[Henri Zimand]

i love you
very strong words
if you love and respect yourself
if you listen to your heart that always says the truth
when you are authentic and say words you mean
then i love you has a deep meaning
we all understand it differently
when your heart brought you to your partner then i love you
can be listened to as it should and understood
if your ego brought you to your partner then i love you
sounds completely out of line and flies away somewhere
excellent
i love your writing

[Celtic Cat]

Love this emotive piece, almost looking like an hour glass..... sands of time may never tell the secrets you look to uncover, but I enjoyed this bit of poetry immensely. I hope you find the love you deserve. ((hugs))