Swimming To The Moon

why not? would be good exercise

If i could fall into the ocean
i would swim to the Moon
plant a flower
paint a picture
gaze down at planet Earth
see all her seas
if i could fall into the ocean
i would swim to Mars
greet the Martians
with an earthy grin say,
look at me
i swam all the way to Mars
just to say Hello my Martian friends
why all the wars here?
Red planet
Look down at my homeland, Earth
Not red but lots of waring there as well
If i could fall into the ocean i would swim into the
arms of Venus
maybe her love could save us all
 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I don'tknow thinking here has made you write one hell of a masterpiece with an excellant message... yeah the human race is in need of saving we just need to step back and take a look... so beautiful and thought provocing write. Defiantely a fav of mine.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Mixed metaphors of war and peace; injustice and the way forward (perhaps)!

Lets hope Venus, Roman goddess of love, beauty and fertility, can quickly win over the charms of Mars, god of war, without you having to swim back and forth with their messages.

Exquisite write!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Antony]

Chloe, I can feel your thoughts , they are deeply rooted inside your caring heart, you take your reader on a journey to places where dreams are born. Lets hope that soon all this will go away. This is simply expressed.

[Jenny Davis]

Such a great poem and with so much love in all the lines!!! Excellent visuals, my friend :)

[jeRRy.whaLLey]

this is dreamy and a good exercise in what if - language is our tool of the trade and we can paint brilliant images of our Dreams of what if - yet it is often like trying to tell a blind man about colour; how do we define Love? We are translators of a language only the Heart can hear - and we are inventors of new ways of seeing the Dream - like you did here!

[Blackbirdsong]

Another favorite is back...you may say you're just jumbling down thoughts or writing randomly, but this is really one of your best and I'm so glad it wasn't lost.

[Kellius the Genius]

Hey Chloe: descent peice alot of feelings yet plain and discreet,
also smooth flow from sentence to sentence.
Simply marvelous.

[E. M. Murren]

What a fun, yet lovely thought. So well expressed. I am enjoying reading these reposted poems. LOL It is like finding Christmas presents in June. LOL This is such a joy to read. Thank you for sharing this with us.

[Brenda Sue]

Such imagination! I love it and the message is great. Wonderfully written. Great job.

[Billy]

i haven't come on here in a while, and this was the first thing i read. it made me wonder why i ever left. it makes me think of neko case, but it remains independent and thought provoking in a seperate sense.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Imagination, polluted with reality. Very well written, with a message that shouts for attention.