Cotton Heart

A girl with a cotton - heart
soft as a favorite tee
to soften the blow should he fall
white as the first snowfall
pure, true
good
to help in his darkest hours
she is who he is looking for


A girl from the South lands
voice as thick as molasses
dripping sweetness
soft
yet sturdy
to speak for him when he cannot

I have looked down the alleyways
behind every lamp post
the Salvation Army , she may have enlisted
this girl with a cotton- heart

I look and look but she is elusive
she is like a chameleon
blends into surroundings
if..
if she even exists
this girl
with a cotton- heart

I'll continue my quest
because he deserves this
his life has been dark
painful and wrought with woes
and he is looking for a girl with a cotton- heart
soft yet sturdy
the girl with the cotton-heart

Author's Note

written for a friend

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

This is really lovely Chloe. It reads like a lovely fable of this girl with the cotton heart. I really like how you repeated that line throughout. I did spot some typos - little itty bitty ones - but besides that this was really an enjoyable poem to read.

[Jenny Davis]

Oh, this read like a song, dear...I loved how you brought real things into this piece. There was also a sense of sarcasm in it, which I enjoyed....very nice :)

[Stacy A. Foster]

his life has been dark
painful and wrought with woes
and he is looking for a girl with a cotton- heart
soft yet sturdy

This is sad... definitely a sense of longing for a special lady. Awww.... Cotton is sooo nice. Very snugly, comfortable, fits well, etc. Just like she would be for him hopefully.

I hope he finds her and she's everything he wished for and then some. :)

[Cre A. Tivity]

I love the imagery, in particular "voice as thick as sorghum molasses dripping sweetness soft yet sturdy". In my opinion, "Cotton Heart" would work well if it was all written in 3rd POV, (from the guy's perspective). I liked the first two stanzas the most. I think starting both stanzas off with "a girl", describing her, and how she can help him is rhythmic.
Nice poem!

[Robert Luna]

Chloe, Wow I loved this piece. Your words burled through to my very core. I could feel the words and not just hear them. I was taken aback to the thought of a harden man seeking the soft love of another and it truly being there waiting for him and the end of his journey.

Perfectly Written and Pleasure to Read

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This is so cute, A girl with a cotton heart. I really enjoyed this read Chloe. To find a girl like this is a quest I am sure. I like the idea of a cotton heart, not something that has ever come to my mind before, but a new theme I like. I really liked the tone of this piece. if that makes sense, I like the idea you have here. Good write!
Kates

[Emily B]

I know a girl with a cotton heart. . . lovely description of a search. When he finds her, she'll wrap him in her soft arms and hold on to him always. Lovely.

[Greg the Bard]

I would never have put those two words together. However it works well in explanation of the chase. Soft yet sturdy is something I would not use and again it works well Great write

[Bubo]

Chloe

Such a lovely thought behind each word........a cotton heart conjures up so many
soft pure images, and I think your friend would be so proud to have this framed and hung,
so when that cotton heart arrives he can show her............so many wonderful lines..

A girl from the Southlands
voice as thick as sorgum molasses
dripping sweetness
soft
yet sturdy
to speak for him when he cannot

Beautiful.......don't change a word!

[Staci Brown]

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sweet and loving poem Chloe... portrayal of the search for one's true love.. well done...

couple typo's in there kiddo :)

Faerie Blessings!
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