Paint Me As I Am

a poem

Paint me as I am
All the imperfections
Do you see them?
I mean, really, they are quite obvious
so paint them a shade of
grey

Paint me as I am all the consellations

I was runner up in the game of life

Never the winner

So paint them a hue of

if I only knew


Paint me as I am
Silliness
shyness
The shyness may not show so well
still
it's there
As for the silliness
it shines right through
So paint them a hue of
blue

Paint me as I am

All the love inside

I gave it away

You took it for granted

Sucked it up

Now I'm a half empty cup

Paint them a color of

sorrow

One you may have to borrow

if

It's not in your pallette


Paint me as I am
All the passion
joy
The happiness
once so apparent
Paint them a shade that is
transparent

Paint me as I am

The

sadness

insecurities

regerts

remorse

the losses

they hurt so hard

so paint them the

deepest hue of blackish blue


Paint me as I am
A heart as big as the Texas sky
Yet as empty as yesterdays coffee cup
Paint my heart many colors
but the crack
paint it the same shade of
if I only knew

My heart paint it

red

pink

purple

indigo

because it was once

alive

vibrant


Paint me as I am
Paint me like me
Tell me, what do you see






 

Author's Note

This is a poem i wrote about five years ago .. i was depressed.. it does not look like the original which had some colored text and a different format.. too bad

Reviews

[Bubo]

Fabulous
love the layout and comparisons
to your heart and all the hurt inside......

We tend to see so many emotions in
colours but always the heart red and
our moods many different ones.........
its amazing when we think that colours
represent so much in our hearts.

Very sad piece though.

[Allen J Davies]

This is just perfect the best thing I've read on here in ages to be honest. Evocative strong but acessible and not oversentimental but full of pure ideas sensations. The whole concept of painting and its repeated use just structure the poem so excellently and use of color simple words that evoke so much. Well done great. A real treat.

[Nats]

this one's ______________________!!!! can't think of a word..
I like it... very _____________________.
this made my day.

[Ryan Gilroy]

we are all differnet colors in life. Blue shows us the depression that can take an albeit normal day and turn it upside down and inside out. Red shows us our hostility and our anger towards others. Green will make us envyous over the stupidest and the most tedious little nothings that we make our life worth it. Also not to dwell on it, but there is no winners in life, the runner up gets his name etched with care and compassion when the winners of history get to dictate the tale towards the next generation. We often paint each other with letters to combine into fruitful and artistic words. I feel your poem shows that in the minimalist writing used for great affect here. After all it's the simplicity of your title is what drew me closer to it.

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This is so heartfelt. I too like the references of colors to your heart, and the emotion that is being described. I also get a little sad as i read this, to think of the broken pieces that you must be feeling, yet want to be put back together. I may be a little off here. There is a lot of truth here in describing so many emotions of heart break and pain in general. As always Chloe, just beautiful.
Much Love,
Kates

[Ismael Rodriguez Jr.]

Chloe you wrote something real good. The way you intergrated the colors works great. The structure of this is amazing. And the rhythm flows perfectly.

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Amazing poem. I keep reading it again and again. Thanks for writing it

[Rain]

i like this poem. the rhythm is great and keeps pushing me to read on. The repeated words and structures make this poem even better.

[Annabelle]

beautiful picture..amazing poem ...the structure makes it that much more enjoyable..as the colors change there is a pause...loved it

[Abi Smith]

awesome use of colors! i love this poem chloe... i love it!

sry i cant give a technical review... i'm really tired right now :(...

but awesome poem! awesome!

[O!]

Paint yourself a pretty picture in all the colours you could use coz ure so colourful and that's the you I know......

...am sorry to hear that only a few colours are to be seen at the moment....i do hope u feel better :-(......it was a beautiful poem of u in the colours u wanted to represent ur 'melancholy mood' and 'feelings'........but ure more than that......!

A beautiful poem....written with a red heart gone blue.....xxx

typo: regerts (regrets)

take care dear Chloe....xxxxxxxxx hugs

O!