Summer Rocks

There's nothing quite like buggering off in to the wilderness with a collection of like minded reprobates

Two by
         Two by
                  Two by
Three
       Meandering summer
Days
       Donning vibrant flower jackets
   Crowded medley of gorse
Fine hydrangea patchwork
         To weave between

Rocks stark
                                Isolated
A thousand paths are carved

      In weatherbeaten faces
Creeping finger
         Tips curled
Toes
                Ascent or
Traverse or
            Descend or

         Fall
Horizontal on turf
       In amongst the ferns
Music smoke and sun
           Shine to each other
Laugh with each other

             Enjoy it
                            While it lasts
   

Author's Note

Going back to my poetic roots, no punctuation and some different use of space. I've missed writing like this!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Sparkling, tumbling ideas seem to embody the way it can feel when exploring nature & soaking in the delights of summer, step by step, every nook & cranny. I love how your title could be taken two ways: "rocks" as in hard things or "rocks" as in being totally awesome. Around here, this describes spring becuz summers are too hot for playful exploration. Either way, great mood of playful exploration (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gerald Parker]

Think of the poem as being something which is heard read aloud, what is the point of setting a piece of writing like this? And, moreover, what is wrong with punctuation? Sorry but I don't belong on this site.

[PatrickPink]

Thank you for your opinion. What I was attempting to create here is a piece that moves away from traditional punctuation. Form and spacing can be used to dictate pace just as easily as traditional punctuation, by controlling the speed at which the reader progresses through the piece, and using blank space to emphasise words or key ideas. Criticism is important my man, as is your voice and your opinion, don't worry about it not belonging anywhere!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well I enjoy your style anyway. When you can use words form is secondary. And here you once more provide the impressionists view of your ramble and it simply flows with detail that captivates.

[PatrickPink]

Thank you, that's reassuring to hear, as I know it's not necessarily universally appealing! I love using spacing to dictate the flow of a poem anyway, and just considering how a piece looks, rather than just how it sounds! Thanks again for all your reviews, and I can't wait to have a look through some of your writing 😊