Quiet moments

Wrapped in surrender

The tease of an ocean breeze 

bringing a soft memory 

dancing with the moon... 

across the milky way 

humming your favorite tune  

of true love in early June... 

The scent of lavender as 

sandpipers find sweet reprieve 

among dunes of yesteryear... 

seashells wash upon the shore 

holding specks of gold and 

mysterious tales of love untold... 

Shades of repose in tears of 

sweet kisses of surrender... 

lavender and rose line the 

horizon of dreams where 

hearts entwine on waves of 

adventure and destiny... 

 

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

The ailments put here, especially the lavender and rose line add more charm into your poem. I almost forgot to get the story behind it as I was lost in your choice of words... Its really great to hear the rhymes, although the last stanza doesn't rhyme, still it creates a concluding sense itself. Different ideas are gathered to get a finished and beautiful work which absolutely is a difficult task. I appreciate the way you started and concluded, all the words felt most amazing to me. Where in you could have added some more lines in order to describe something more of it....
Good job!!!
Anindita : )

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Anindita, I appreciate your charming review.
We live in a city where the Rappahannock River
runs through it and out to the Potomac. Touches of
the American Indians and later on the Civil War.
We live in an emotional state of mind and find solace
in the rapids and sounds of nature.

[Anindita Janhabee]

I can understand that. This world is full of hostility. And I think writers are the only beings who can get peace at least in their writings... So I started my journey in writing at a young age. I hope you get tranquility in your writings...
Anindita : )

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Anindita, in order to stay healthy in mind and body, it is necessary to enjoy the beauty of nature... the bird songs and even the snow in winter replenishes the nurturing of Spring. Every season has therapy for our soul. truly, Pat

[Anindita Janhabee]

Very true ma'am.... : )

[emmajoy]

This, dear, dear Pat., is love, poetry and an eternity of beautiful language.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Emma... seashells hold secrets of the wistful waves ... when love is discovered ... thank you for leaving your heart prints. Gently, Pat

[emmajoy]

Always a pleasure, petal. :)

[Pratikshya Garabadu]

couldnt get your rhyming scheme ....is it rhymed r a free verse.....but overally ....the words chosen are just astounding.....a poetry that refreshes ones feelings!!

[Valentine]

So many of the things you have mentioned are controlled by God and natural things He created seem to be the most awesome to me. Valentine

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Kathie... I find your review to be so
soft and gentle. Being close to nature is a
read moredear Kathie... I find your review to be so
soft and gentle. Being close to nature is a
beautiful gift to be cherished. truly, Pat

[Patricia Wedel]

Being close to nature is a beautiful gift. Pat

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An imagery filled poem this one....

Soft and sensual on the mind, this poem certainly gives off a very strong sense of calm and serenity. Your poems are always descriptive towards nature and floral scents and visions. When combined with the slow trickle of your words on the page, they create a piece filled with wonder and harmony.

Delicately written poetic work.

[1VJ]

This dances on your page like 'the moon across the milky way', imagery is superbly intriguing, arousing the senses to new heights.

[samparks,sam]

The tease of an ocean breeze
bringing a soft memory
dancing with the moon...
across the milky way
humming your favorite tune
of true love in early June...

The scent of lavender as
sandpipers find sweet reprieve
among dunes of yesteryear...
seashells wash upon the shore
holding specks of gold and
mysterious tales of love untold...

Shades of repose in tears of
sweet kisses of surrender...
lavender and rose line the
horizon of dreams where
hearts entwine on waves of
adventure and destiny...


Really nice poem

[Paul Bell]

Memories of unfettered love. What a fantastic journey you took us on.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Paul, the ocean has many moods,
however it holds secrets that may surface...
a shell held to your ear so you may hear the
sounds of the roaring sea. I love your review.
truly, Pat

[SleeplessVolcano]

I live those moments dipped in lavender.....the peace we get from quiet moments can sometimes be tremendously noisy....:)

Great poetry.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Sleepless, peace can be Ike quiet thunder that
can soothe the soul like a lullaby of dreams. I appreciate
your feelings. truly, Pat

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful and amazing use of description took me to perfect place and memory. I enjoyed your words and thoughts. Thank you Patricia for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Patricia Wedel]

dear John, your gentle review has touched the
shore of my dreams. May sandpipers give you a
sense of love and peace. truly, Pat

[Coyote Poetry]

Always my pleasure to read your work dear Pat.