Flash Back Viet Nam 1969

Flash Back Viet Nam 1969

A Story by Patches I'm not so new anymore.
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A tale that is/was too true in many instances

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Enter a soft spring evening

 in the calm, quiet transition

between sun and moon---I wait

near our favorite lakeside picnic spot.

 

Stars peek through jungle foliage.

The moon, half full

lights the scrub above our heads.

 

I sit on the bench

alone with my thoughts

of you.

 

A wet, insect laden breeze

cools our faces

 we dare to breath through

 mosquito netted faces.

 

Lake marsh mosquitoes

annoy my ears,land, bite, fly.

You approach silently, I recognize

your tred though, You sit not breaking 

the silence. I take your hand, kiss your palm----

 

The moonrise is magnificent---

we embrace, your long ebon hair,

a curtian, shields us from prying eyes

as we kiss.

 

As we watch the rhythmic dancing

reflection of moon-in-the-water

I whisper in your ear----

"Quiet soldier--- Charlie's near!"

 

 

© 2011 Patches I'm not so new anymore.


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i am overwhelmed by the intensity and raw beauty of this poem. outstanding !

Posted 13 Years Ago


I hate to think of you reliving such harrowing moments in the best of times. This was a very clever right Robert. Amazing view of what flashbacks must be like. I love it.


Posted 13 Years Ago


this resounds in the chambers of the heart~ a haunting sweep ot tears~

Posted 13 Years Ago


those echoes never die , sorry you have to hear them ...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is really good. I like how smooth the transition is between the present and the past. It makes an almost frightening realization that one can go from a romantic evening to a different world all together. Reminds me of Slaughterhouse Five.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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