So Called Heroes

I'll start with the positives:

The Plot: The plot line that you created exploded in imagination and had a definite comic style to it. Ceasar is a great city that you created and the detail you put into the storyline is amzaing.

The Characters: The unique personalities you gave each character made it fun to read this story and they complimented each other. They drew in a lot of interest, (especially Jax), and that's an accomplishment that you should be very proud of. Also the way you had them use their powers was a fresh inventiveness that I haven't seen in a lot of authors.

The Dialogue: While I did find some typos, the dialogue was excellent and helped describe the situations the characters were in perfectly.

Now the negatives (While there may not be many I still think you should know them):

The Plot: I had a hard time understanding what was happening in the beginning of the story but after I read more I started to get it.

The Characters: At times I started to find myself thinking that some of the characters were starting to act the same and that kind of takes away their identities. I also personally think that there were a bit too many characters introduced.

The Dialogue: As I said before I did find a few typos but they were easily missed. The one thing I did find that bothered me was how short most, not all, the chapters were.

Posted 13 Years Ago

super cool man!

Posted 13 Years Ago

i cant read this its toooooooooo long

Posted 13 Years Ago

I'll start with the positives:

The Plot: The plot line that you created exploded in imagination and had a definite comic style to it. Ceasar is a great city that you created and the detail you put into the storyline is amzaing.

The Characters: The unique personalities you gave each character made it fun to read this story and they complimented each other. They drew in a lot of interest, (especially Jax), and that's an accomplishment that you should be very proud of. Also the way you had them use their powers was a fresh inventiveness that I haven't seen in a lot of authors.

The Dialogue: While I did find some typos, the dialogue was excellent and helped describe the situations the characters were in perfectly.

Now the negatives (While there may not be many I still think you should know them):

The Plot: I had a hard time understanding what was happening in the beginning of the story but after I read more I started to get it.

The Characters: At times I started to find myself thinking that some of the characters were starting to act the same and that kind of takes away their identities. I also personally think that there were a bit too many characters introduced.

The Dialogue: As I said before I did find a few typos but they were easily missed. The one thing I did find that bothered me was how short most, not all, the chapters were.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Interesting format on the cafe.

Posted 13 Years Ago