Please read and let me know what you think! Need good/bad feedback so I can know what's right and wrong so I can turn this into the best story it can be! Thanks!
My Review
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The Plot: The plot line that you created exploded in imagination and had a definite comic style to it. Ceasar is a great city that you created and the detail you put into the storyline is amzaing.
The Characters: The unique personalities you gave each character made it fun to read this story and they complimented each other. They drew in a lot of interest, (especially Jax), and that's an accomplishment that you should be very proud of. Also the way you had them use their powers was a fresh inventiveness that I haven't seen in a lot of authors.
The Dialogue: While I did find some typos, the dialogue was excellent and helped describe the situations the characters were in perfectly.
Now the negatives (While there may not be many I still think you should know them):
The Plot: I had a hard time understanding what was happening in the beginning of the story but after I read more I started to get it.
The Characters: At times I started to find myself thinking that some of the characters were starting to act the same and that kind of takes away their identities. I also personally think that there were a bit too many characters introduced.
The Dialogue: As I said before I did find a few typos but they were easily missed. The one thing I did find that bothered me was how short most, not all, the chapters were.
The Plot: The plot line that you created exploded in imagination and had a definite comic style to it. Ceasar is a great city that you created and the detail you put into the storyline is amzaing.
The Characters: The unique personalities you gave each character made it fun to read this story and they complimented each other. They drew in a lot of interest, (especially Jax), and that's an accomplishment that you should be very proud of. Also the way you had them use their powers was a fresh inventiveness that I haven't seen in a lot of authors.
The Dialogue: While I did find some typos, the dialogue was excellent and helped describe the situations the characters were in perfectly.
Now the negatives (While there may not be many I still think you should know them):
The Plot: I had a hard time understanding what was happening in the beginning of the story but after I read more I started to get it.
The Characters: At times I started to find myself thinking that some of the characters were starting to act the same and that kind of takes away their identities. I also personally think that there were a bit too many characters introduced.
The Dialogue: As I said before I did find a few typos but they were easily missed. The one thing I did find that bothered me was how short most, not all, the chapters were.
My name is Patrick and I'm currently working on a comic/manga entitled "So Called Heroes". My dream one day is for this to hit the shelves so everyone can get a look at it...Cause I Just Gotta Make It.. more..