i've been sleeping

Your smile is the sun of your face

when that comes out I know it's going to be a good day

Your eyes are the stars

they just shine

even when I'm asleep I think about you

I crawl tired through a labyrinth

I see a bat on fire

and I don't know what to do when I hear a voice

soft and strange

telling me to visit the eyewash fountain

for tears and wishes only

to be fast

because my dreams aren't so reliable

and I could lose my legs

or be a midnight train in a valley maze

or left in the dust, without a kiss,

by a desert haze

when I wake up then I have to go

back there if only to finish what I started

I never find the fountain

is it on a stupid mountain?

but that smokey voice returns

and tells me to enter

and I laugh

because I don't know what else to do

and the voice is coming closer

then retreats

I can see a tail..

and since everything's on fire

I take my time

and cry

and the voice is having fun now

telling me to "cry it out"

SO I do

and then the sun appears over a hill

in the pocket of my world

it grins

and I feel better

almost immediately

Reviews

[Maumil Mehraj]

You are gifted with an amazing sense of imagination and i love the use of words.
Good work!

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW! Heart-Touching Story U have told in this Poem! AMAZING! U have the ability to capture emotions into words! Great! Keep writing! Would love to see Ur work!

[Richard]

thanks very much I'm not very technically good but I like to tell a story so i'm glad you saw that :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

No U are very Good! U know, U should start writing Lyrics ... U can be a Great Lyricist... A great Lyric Poet! :) Don't give up! Just keep writing! And also Read! U will improve A lot! Wish U best of Luck! ^_^

[Richard]

lyrical poetry :O I like it
hah thanks I do write lyrics actually and music just haven't had any motvation in any way lately
thanks so much :) do you live in Pakistan?

[Destiny Dreamer]

OH! U are welcome! Yeah I am PAKISTANI! ^_^

[Richard]

interesting ... wow that's amazing :) I love Pakistan and people from there

[Destiny Dreamer]

Really? That's COOL! *_* :) So Nice of U!

[Richard]

you're welcoooooooome :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

^_^ And U are Canadian! :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yeah A lot! Life style of both the countries are different!